1964703
Yes I was in a store, and yes I actually bought those clothes:

1965055
Lol, they still have the tags and stuff on them

1965078 *hugs tightly* thanks for not leaving me.

1965989
Why would I leave you? *hugs*

1966094 because I look like shit.

1966300
*Ugh* I swear, you're just as crazy as Shutter...

1967156 *snuggles* almost done rewriting the first chapter.

1967742
Cool, I can't wait to read it.

1967742
Also, you have 75 followers!!!

1967882 Here is the rewrite, for your reading and editing pleasure.
Password is the usual.

1968105
Alright, gimme a bit and I'll give you my critique of it.

1969879 quick question. Are you still okay with... *leans in and kisses you*?

1970077
Of course I am. Why wouldn't I be? *kisses you back*

1970118 c-could we?

1970130
*holds you*
Could we what?

1970150 u-u-umm *blushes brightly* p-please-

1970166
*starts kissing your neck passionately, savoring the delicate taste of your skin*

((Gotta go take a shower, when I get back do you still want me to give you my edit? of your rewrite?))

1970201 ahhh! *I moan out softly* yes!

((Edit if you want))

1970216
*I bring my lips back to yours as I kiss you softly*

((Just wanted to make sure, I'll post it in a second))

1968105
Alright, one thing before I start, I'm not all too sure about the new title you gave it. To be honest, I really liked the name *Scribble**Scribble*, and when you changed it to AAD I was kinda like meh, but it worked I guess. This new title though, it just sounds a bit too generic and corny for me.

If mom hadn't made me stop, I would've tried to skip grades all the way out of Highschool. It would've taken a few tries, but I could've done it.

I'm not sure how I feel about this statement. I realize it's just Scribble giving her honest opinion, but it almost sets her as being a Mary Sue.

I also knew mom wouldn't move me and her too a new town based on letters but tere had been a period of interviews that never got published a while back

*to, *there

because my my mane is down to my hooves.

I think 'goes' might be a good replacement here, it helps the sentence flow a bit more.

but he is dead.

I think this might have more of a sudden impact if you shortened it to 'he's'

"ready dear?" she is smiling.

*Ready *She

but this is the closest I could ever get to saying "I love you mom", and sometimes I just need to tell her that.

Nothing wrong here, just that this sentence hit me right in the feels

She uses her magic to adjust my bags on my back.

I'd consider changing that to 'the', although it isn't necessary, but it might sound a bit better.

My wings are too small to ever fly with, and I'm not a very good Pegasus.

AGH! More feels!

I take a peek at the tree using my other sense. I can hear and see the life giving energies feeding the tree. It was unicorn.

I wonder, not for the first time...
... Equestrian at least.

I think introducing this concept in such great detail so early on might be a bad move. What you might want to do instead is hint at the idea she can do this, but outright reveal it just yet.

The door is answered by a Lavender Unicorn, female.

I think this description is a bit dry, wouldn't you say? What about Twilight's mane? Her tail? Her almond shaped eyes? Even her cutie mark?

"Hi><my name is Twilight Sparkle. Me and your mom are friends."

I think placing a comma here might show a bit better how formal Twilight's being to Scribble.

Ahh><she was waiting for me to talk.

Again, adding a comma here wouldn't hurt.

Ponyvill on the other hoof was warm

*Ponyville

but I had gladly given it up for mom.

I think in this instance it would be better to use 'I'd' instead

Ponies two years older then me

*hugs*
*than

but seeing as how she already said my name so I couldn't use the card now.

That doesn't really need to be there, in my opinion.

as was miss Cheerilee

*As

Why had my mother talked to her first?...

Should be '...?'

1970403 *my arms softly wrap themselves around you as I give in to the moment.*

((Excellent, thanks for the help!))

1970485
*My hands run up and down your stomach, feeling every intimate inch of your body*

((No problem ))

1970543 *I gasp at your touch* Fade, I need you. ((genders?))

1970559
*I whisper lowly* "I... I need you too..."

((Whatever you'd like, I suppose))

1970661 ((guyxguy?)) *I shudder at your answer* I-Im ready.

1970706
((That works for me))

*I bring my hands onto either end of your shirt and begin pulling it over your head*

1970733*the shirt slips off easily, and I blush brightly as more of my skin is revealed*

1970756
*I lean in and kiss your bare chest as I grope the crotch of your jeans tenderly*

1970793 *I moan louder as I feel you squeeze me lightly. Using your distraction I try to remove your shirt*

1970813
*I take my attention away from your crotch for a few moments as I help you get off my shirt. As it slides off I turn back to you, placing one hand on your cheek and another around your stomach as I pull you in close for another kiss*

1970863 *I groan frustratedly into your mouth as we are pulled into another embrace*

1970919
*My lips trail down your body once more as I lower myself to your hips. My hands go to work unzipping your pants as I stare lovingly up at you*

1970965 "f-fade" * I whisper in slight surprise. I can feel my undergarments getting even tighter as my button comes undone*

1970982
*I bring my nose into your crotch as I finally pull down your jeans. I take in your wonderful smell as I deeply inhale*

1971071 *my hips grind forward in instinct and I place my hand lightly on your head* p-please use me however you w-want.

1971071 f-fade, can I lay down on my back first?

1971120>>1971173
*At hearing your request I lightly push you onto your back and onto the bed. As I have you pinned down I slip my hand underneath your underwear and feel your warm cock*

1971202 oh my gosh! *I cry out excitedly as you firmly grip my shaft*

1971231
"I'm guessing you like that then?" *I ask teasingly as I gradually begin stroking the length of your member. As I'm doing that I take your other hand and guide it over to my crotch with the exception that you'll unbutton my pants*

1971322 *my hand come up short* f-fade, try turning around. I-I-I want to taste it. ((69ing))

1971346
*I nodded quickly and turned around so that my face was in your crotch and vice versa. I nuzzle your underwear lovingly* "I.. I want to taste yours too..." *I say as l finally pull down your underwear and give your cock some breathing room*

1971381 * I quickly pull down both your pants and underwear. Not wasting a second, I bring my tongue along the throbbing piece in front of me.*

1971388
*Feeling the irresistible tension in my loins, I immediately do the same to you as I lick your deliciously salty rod from tip to base*

1971430 * I escalate things further and take your whole head in my mouth. Without any hesitation I bring it to my throat and back. Just the taste and heat of it make my sphincter and cock spasm.*

1971449
*I moan deeply, and down your cock in reaction, letting my tongue lather up your member with my saliva. I continue moaning as I your shaft, my hips rocking back and forth on your face*

((Gotta get off soon))

1971467 *I pull away.* f-fade. Finish in me!

1971475
*I slowly take my lips off your cock, lightly kissing your head as I separate. I roll off of you, the mere idea of getting to orgasm inside you making my cock even harder than before*