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Yay! Everyone's favourite wastelands blacksmith's story continues!
As iron so sharpens iron,its nature is changed.
As the piece is tempered, shaped by the blows it receives, the form changes.
The mettle is tested, the dross pulled off, flashing trimmed.
Here now is a heroine who works the forge, and just as with her pieces, knows not what happens to her.
Yet she may still be a functional piece at the end of this, a beautiful work of art from the smith.
...What?
That would make the thing nearly unusable!
Pointless to talk to a character that doesn't exist but what you really want for a shotgun is a spiked choke. If that's what it's called I can't recall.
Dohohoho, excellent! Glad to see Alloy back, Oh Ham, my Ham.
Man, I know what that's like.
I really like Kyra so far, even if she did kind of just butt right in. There's enough little details that got me very curious about her. She seems a bit naive in ways, which makes me wonder. And "Blue" made me chuckle.
And so begins a new arc. It's a calm intro. I found myself about halfway through, and though nothing big had happened yet, I found myself enjoying it. A quiet chapter relies heavily on either dialogue or internal thoughts, and this chapter did quite well in that regard, I felt it held my attention quite well. It's a good lead-in to the start of another adventure, and I'm certainly looking forwards to more in the new year.
Glad to see Kyra, too. I do wonder at her part in all this.
And in addition to that, some part of me really is wondering if there really is gonna be an element or romance here or not. Shipping aside, I'm unsure what the interactions between Grit and Alloy are going towards - and more than that, I wonder what Grit's... goal, I suppose, ultimately is, in where he would like their relationship to be at. Friends? More? I guess we'll see.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eFlPYim-SUc
I always find the pacing of this story really enjoyable, and this arc is starting off by piquing my curiosity pretty well.
Alloy is so socially ignorant, it's like watching a child learn how to interact with other people for the first time. It makes for interesting reading, as she tries to puzzle out people's motives. It's kind of heart wrenching.
Any who, glad to see a new chapter of this, keep up the great work!
This chapter took time to be published but it was nice, the wait was worth it.
I'm starting to like a lot Alloy, especially how she interact with other character ,to be exacter how she don't interact, she is maybe afraid, she may don't know because of a lack of experience or, like the end of the chapter say, she don't understand her feelings.
Will we have informations about Alloy's life before the story explaining how she became what she is or will it be up to us to imagine it (childhood in Wastelands may not be that great) ?
Good luck to write the next chapter in one month.
I'm really enjoying this. It's a very well-written window on the Fallout: Equestria world, and I can't wait to see the next chapter.
I smell romance. *Sniff-sniff*
And it smells like... gunpowder.
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Well hey, at least it's not that long! I think? Actually with this last chapter I finally broke the 6-digit-wordcount. Either way, I'm glad to have piqued your interest!
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Daw, thank you! I hope it was worth the wait!
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That was a lovely bit of prose, and it does fit what's happening in the story.
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Kyra is... enthusiastic. But for what it's worth, her idea consisted of the wire wrapped around a newly-installed guard rather than the grip itself. That's probably on me to have clarified, my bad.
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It's good to have her back! Some serious writer's block happened here.
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I'm glad you like her! I was worried about having her come back after so long, but it was part of the plan, as it were. It's fun finally getting to show what she's really like.
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Part of me was worried about having a slow, quiet chapter (mostly), but I was assuaged by the thought that after the events leading in 10 and 11, a breather was needed.
Grit's in a... weird spot right now, as well. We'll have to see how this develops.
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Freaking Glorious.
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Man given how much I agonize over pacing, it's a relief to hear that. And yea, Alloy is trying, but, especially right now, she's gonna take some time. Either way, glad you enjoyed the chapter.
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I'm glad you enjoyed it. As for Alloy's backstory, who knows? It might come up.
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Man I need to go back to my humorous Author's Notes. I liked 'em better.
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Thank you!
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Or did she? Maybe? Either way, it was a tough moment for her.
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The best (?) romances are founded on gunpowder.
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I'm French so I can try to translate. I just hope that you will be able to understand my lousy English (being unable to understand the French and the English version of that will be rather unfortunate).
I have the little blue. What about you?
This Cunt hit me (in the head).
If you can't fight against a pony you shouldn't hunt with us, should you ?
Take their weapons.
This one have some books. She mayn't be as stupid as she look like.
We will see.
Master(I don't think that there is a feminine version of this word in English) Laveau, there are the ponies that we caught last night.
Show them the radio. Tell me if she success.
"Vite" mean "quickly"
I hope that I was able to help you. Tell me if I have forget something or if you didn't understand something.
6782166 I'm the kind of guy that stopped the first Iron-Man movie when they got to the "terrorist demands" part, because I didn't know what they were saying(spoiler alert, it gives away the "twist"). So yes, a translation cheat sheet would be most appreciated.
6782557 Just saw your comment and that most definitely helped, so thank you, most would have the female equivalent to master as mistress, but that doesn't fit for every situation as master can often be used for both genders. Oh, and your English is great, I'v met many people whose primary language is English and yet butcher the language to pieces... So sad...
Is that a reference to Call of Doodie?
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And someone beat me to it! Thank you for helping out!
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Nope. I'm afraid I don't actually know what that is.
6793477 Then have a link.
Huh, her 'Refusal of the Call' is a little bit out of order. Damn forge pone, can't keep a schedule for a damn. Liked the chapter and look forward to where this new arc leads, also more catbird is always a good thing.
a note, those wingblades she made don't happen to have a run in with a train latter in there life do they?
A shotgun is a fairly short-range firearm with a very limited magazine, so adding a bayonet isn't entirely foolish...
I have to applaud the concept running through this story. An economy is the foundation of any civilization, and most Fallout stories show nothing but characters scavenging the impossibly rich scraps of what had existed before. Your protagonist is actually turning things of little value into things of greater value, that she and her customers together can profit from value that had not previously existed.
That is the very heart and soul of an economy. Bravo.
(To have an economy, somebody has to have the skills to make stuff, find stuff, or repair stuff that somebody else needs or wants. Without that, marketing and sales people have nothing to market or sell, and management has nothing to manage.)
And all caught up. *sigh*
This story is brilliant. You deliver the essence of Fallout in so many scenes that it's just incredibly immersive. Your protagonist is... well, not exactly likable but definitely easy to relate to. The whole business obsession seems more and more like a coping mechanism for past trauma, and it looks to be failing little by little now. Thanks to a new trauma of course.
She's got depth, a lot of it. I very much liked how it wasn't a given to reject Malice's offer as would be the 'morally right' thing to do... and how you even managed to make the raider seem like a person with goals and hopes and responsibilities that she takes seriously. Almost sympathetic. Nothing's ever as easy as one would wish it to be, and you do that old adage great justice.
Great worldbuilding, great characters, great character development, great story.
Very much looking forward to the next installment. And take your time, if that's what you need to keep the quality this high.
Most of these replies are incredibly late, and I'm very sorry, but we're only hours away from Chapter 13!
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I couldn't tell you for sure! And forgepon just needs to get herself a scheduling book. She'll get there.
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I'm glad you're enjoying it so far! Honestly that's the kind of idea I was going for, where most Fallout stories would center around scavenging, I wanted to have a character be a creator of sorts, y'know? Not to mention a pony who has a home and roots in a specific town rather than a wanderer.
And I'm also glad I've managed to accurately portray radio degradation, hehe. Thank you for your comments!
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Part of me was worried it would come across as a bit too corny, but it was only a small part. I'm always glad to hear it was effective.
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And here's where I thank you profusely for your kind words, this brightened my day so much yesterday, especially in light of the fact that I always worry whether or not the pacing of the story holds up when read all in one sitting, rather than the serialized format that has each chapter going up sometimes months apart. I do wish I could say that quality assurance is entirely what delays new chapters, but that hasn't always been true. I sincerely hope Chapter 13 lives up to your expectations.
Either way, thank you again.
Ahh... I get it. (I think.) Silver Trim got replaced by a changeling, and Grit is trying to follow the MoM memory orbs back to his parent hive.
I really like the subtle distinction you express here. It's my sword, but it's the revolver. As if Alloy is subconsciously distancing herself from Copper's murder. Granted, the gun may also lack the sense of ownership she has for the sword she created, but that never stopped her from thinking of it as "my revolver" before.
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That would be a breaching choke- they are often serrated so they can dig into a wooden door before blowing the lock off with special non-fragmenting rounds, designed to just pulverise the door but not penetrate through. Would make for a pretty brutal poking stick. A full-on muzzle break would do the same, if used like a hammer, but thats not a shotgun thing and more fragile.
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That would be the muzzle not the handle.
O o f
That deficit hurts like a mother fucker.
Spamming Doom, spamming Doom, read all the chapters as only a Doom can, does he rhyme, not at all, wacthout its REVIEW TIME!
My doom sense are tinkling and telling me that we will return to Sugarland soon, something about a certain pink suit wearing stallion getting his ass kicked, and with the crocs just around the corner are we going to get our forth team member! I will make it happen even if I will have to write a non-canon fan chapter if need be! We need a croc in the party!