After being in a coma for several years, A pony wakes up and finds her world is destroyed. With the help of friends made along the way, this pony stumbles upon a forgotten theory, that might prevent the war that ended the world...
This chapter was good. And I'm out of useful tips I can give without the comment being as long as PH chapter to make things perfectly clear. Oh, wait, there's one tip left: make a space after the "..." between two words. E.g.: worst...night...ever... <-> worst... night... ever... I did it like you most of the time, but sometimes this leads to strange gaps at the end of a line. It'll also raise your word count, and that isn't a bad thing, is it?
A pony with compassion for raiders, that's something you don't see often... At least not for long. And Brisk hang upside down there for how long? I doubt that's healthy...
4250546 Thank you! I can always count on you to pop up in a Fallout Equestria story. Like earlier. Anyway, new chapter should be up in a few days, and I`m kinda making this up as I go when it comes to where this is going. Though, I already planned out the plot and the end, so don`t worry about that. Next chapter will be longer, and the next one after that. Every chapter will get longer and longer. I counted and it was about 1,500 words long than the first chapter. So, if my calculation is correct, by the time this story ends, (Planned about 70 chapters) It will be about 800,000 words long? So about longer than "Fallout: Equestria", but shorter than "Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons". (P.S. Blackjack is my favorite pony) Pretty decent amount for that many chapters. I personally think the plot is good, which basically the end is a mindfuck. It will make you look at Fallout: Equestria in a whole new perspective. Anyway glad you enjoyed it and you mentioned you had a story. I think I`ll check out. Thanks for reading!
This chapter was good. And I'm out of useful tips I can give without the comment being as long as PH chapter to make things perfectly clear.
Oh, wait, there's one tip left: make a space after the "..." between two words. E.g.:
worst...night...ever...<-> worst... night... ever...I did it like you most of the time, but sometimes this leads to strange gaps at the end of a line. It'll also raise your word count, and that isn't a bad thing, is it?
A pony with compassion for raiders, that's something you don't see often... At least not for long.
And Brisk hang upside down there for how long? I doubt that's healthy...
4250546 Thank you! I can always count on you to pop up in a Fallout Equestria story. Like earlier. Anyway, new chapter should be up in a few days, and I`m kinda making this up as I go when it comes to where this is going. Though, I already planned out the plot and the end, so don`t worry about that. Next chapter will be longer, and the next one after that. Every chapter will get longer and longer. I counted and it was about 1,500 words long than the first chapter. So, if my calculation is correct, by the time this story ends, (Planned about 70 chapters) It will be about 800,000 words long? So about longer than "Fallout: Equestria", but shorter than "Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons". (P.S. Blackjack is my favorite pony) Pretty decent amount for that many chapters. I personally think the plot is good, which basically the end is a mindfuck. It will make you look at Fallout: Equestria in a whole new perspective. Anyway glad you enjoyed it and you mentioned you had a story. I think I`ll check out. Thanks for reading!
Awesome story! Like Brisk already, and the Snickers reference, made me laugh. Can`t wait to see where this goes!
4255430 Thank You! I love the beverage Brisk, and thought that was a good name. Working on the new chapter.
How come I couldn`t help you edit?
4259973 Sorry, Rineer.
This is a road I have to walk alone...
Just so you know your story was added to the Fallout Equestria Group by G-Man64. Feel free to PM me if you have any questions!
4265416 Got a Link?
4268769 To his page? The group homepage? I'm confused...
4269866 The group homepage, please.
4270029 Ah! Well there's a link on the right side of the page from your story now, but here's a link anyways
4270081 Thanks!