Reading Reaction #1 part 10 (NSFW chapters/separate story.) · 9:25am Sep 28th, 2022
I have to confess in my initial reactions I seem to have missed these chapters because they are marked as a separate story and I can be a blithering idiot so I present a brand new reaction that I’m sticking into the middle of my other parts of the reaction.
So without further ado:
Chapter 31: Expert on Love
The changeling’s body shook. He swallowed aloud. “Whaa… What kind of questions?”
Considering what these chapter are marked as…….
Everypony hates clones like me. Sweetie Belle told me that and other things, as well. When Town’s ponies found clones of some other pony they stashed them all in one room.
I miss the hundreds of Pinkie Pie’s
I don’t want this creep to touch me. No way. I’d rather go back to digging my grave! “Yes, I want it,” I said obediently.
This whole situation makes me really uncomfortable but I suppose that is sort of the point if this whole scene.
Chapter 32: Flutterlicious
“Does somepony need a tutor?” A lavender Alicorn smiled at me. “Don’t you fear little filly, Twilight Sparkle is here to educate you in matters of diversity!”
Oh no this line reminds me of a creepy professor I hated in high school who was always preaching about history and the devil and the worst part is he was the art teacher…..
Anyway another good if uncomfortable read.
Chapter 33: Twilightlicious
The name reminds me of that older song from YouTube where Twilight sings “I’m Twilightlicious.” ( I don’t even remember who made it but based off the story/chapters I’m reading I’m guessing I will be less fun song more Twilight look-a-like arrested for touching a filly….,
“Why can I trust you on that? Is it because you’re an expert of holes since your body is made up of them and all? Do the holes make you feel hollow inside, hole-y changeling?”
I almost forget this is a somewhat innocent child clone slave being forced to do the devils tango with a changeling until she says some dumb BS like this. And then I feel like a shitty person for reading this which I suppose is a testament to you’re writing skills.
“Sure I can. See this dumb expression on the face of the magic hologram.” His hoof waved through it as he turned to me. “It’s clearly you, Clonie. The expression is exactly the same as the one you have now.”
I’ll admit the dumb expression line made me chuckle a little.
“Whatever...” She looked at the sky. “It’s not racist if it’s true...”
Why is the spin-off where a clone is getting F-ed by a changeling making me laugh louder then the original story?! (Because I’m sick in the head probably!)
Chapter 34: A Short Breather
“This is the most fucked up thing you could suggest!”. He stood as him-changeling-self again. “That’s bad taste, deviant. Rarity is your sister, therefore she’s Clonie’s sister, as well. I can’t do that to her. The mere thought of incest is an abomination.”
At least the lad has some moral’s unlike Sweetie 
“It doesn’t matter. I don’t want it. We have strict rules against inner-breeding in our hive. Only diversity can produce progression; not kin. What you’re asking of me and Clonie is really disgusting. There’s no way you can convince me to do that.” He looked at me. “And I don’t understand why you’re playing along with this insanity.”
What a chad Zex is knows he’ll die if he disobeys but still disobeys non the less when it’s a line he will not cross. (MVP of the NSFW chapters so far.)!
Zex smirked.
I’m with him on this side of the conversation they are sheep the princesses order and they follow Ponies are doomed for inevitable destruction and doom (Gen 5 kind of proves that.) this is a very intriguing conversation especially if you change the context to the real world which is the allegory I think you are drawing parallels with.
Zex turned to look at me, still showing off his sharp teeth. He hit a forehoof against the ground. He walked a wide curve around me, keeping his growl even after disappearing through the bushes. His hooves slashed against the leaves as if he was trying to clean them. I managed to keep him occupied for longer than I thought. Yet, I believed even more was expected of me. Sweetie Belle wouldn’t be pleased with me if I let him escape, I imagined ? I rolled on my chest and aimed my head forward, so I could keep an eye on him. The changeling didn’t pay any attention to me. He just cleaned his hooves by slashing them against the leaves.
Damn!
“Nicely done, Zex!” Sweetie Belle high-hooved him.
They are such A-holes I really hope they get what’s coming to them. Even if they can be funny and have some great banter from time to time.
The sound of hoofsteps made my ears perk up. To check on it, I looked between my forelegs, and I saw Zex approaching from behind. He wrapped my tail around a hoof and dragged me closer to him. Grinning, he put his snout above me and took a big whiff. “I might enjoy this, yet.”
…..
Chapter 35: Rainbowlicious
“You better not!” she said.
I like how unapologetically they talk about murder sprees.
“Tell you what, squirt. I’ll keep you up here for a little longer if you give me a kiss.”
*Shudders*man with candy in white van vibe
I clenched my teeth and tried to hold in the tears.
I dunno if I should feel bad or be used to them treating her like this by now.
Chapter 36: Molelestia
“Celestia is not evil, Clonie! You haven’t even seen the real Princess of the Sun. Next time you have something to say, you might try keeping your mouth shut, instead. You talk way too much!”
The way Clonie is stuck between 2 gaslighters/manipulators is an interesting approach for this story to take especially with one hating Ponyville and the other hating all ponies.
Also I’m not sure original Sweetie can be reformed anymore she has violated so many ethical, natural, and governmental laws that she’s worse then the villains in the actual show or comics.
Chapter 37: Nightmare Moon
Time for Clonie to do it with every person who was ever in canon starting with the villains I guess
“TIS A LIE; HER BACKSIDE IS WHOLE! SHE MERELY REFUSES TO PARTICIPATE IN THIS HONORABLE FIGHT”
I understood that reference.
Chapter 38: Big Machintosh & Chapter 39: Changeling in His Prime
“Um, sure... Why not.” He talked as he morphed. “I’m just a regular Earth pony on a stroll, thinking with my undeveloped brain.” He looked up at the sky “La, la, la, I suck at flying and magic, but hey, at least I’ll make my offspring suffer just as much. Yippidy doo da! The Dirt ponies I create shall be at least as useless as me.”
I hate him so much that I kinda love him if that makes any sorta sense.
She stood silent.
He got her there. She abandoned all her friends and family simply because a few of them mistreated her and now look at her some kind of psycho who make, murders, & abuses her own clones.
“Fine, I’ll tell you all about it.”
Changeling’s are not the best creatures to ask about true love or friendship especially not Zex.
“Don’t worry, there’s plenty to go around. You’ll have to wait your turn, though.”
She doesn’t even realize what she just signed herself up for especially since he’s a changeling who is unable to breed in his own hive.
“Whaa... It was you who did all those things! You can’t blame me for anything. I was just—watching. I thought you knew what you were doing, so I let you.”
But she did just watch and let it happen which in this context is just as bad as if she had done it all to her clone herself.
Well I’m conclusion this whole sub-story is sickening but has some good comedy and interesting moral conversations between Zex (Sex with a Z replacing the S.) and Sweetie Belle but overall I’m glad I didn’t read this on my first read of the main story. Because it may have ruined my image of the characters in the story but despite how disturbing this whole thing is it is really well written because of you’re skill and somehow that manages to make both incredible and even more disturbing
I now know I would’ve remembered if I’d read this because I won’t ever forget it now that I have.
I did warn you about the hidden chapters. I even recommended that you skip them.
I'm actually surprised that you found them somewhat enjoyable. I did put a lot of effort into them, but someponies have a hard time appreciating comedy if it involves rape, torture and murder, you know?
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I surprised myself by enjoying some of the comedy but I am a fan of dark comedy and overall it was fairly well written despite how F-ed up it was.
And I though about just posting the next Reading Reaction that is pretty written and skipping this but I decided despite you’re recommendation I’d be annoyed at myself and think it was half assed if I hadn’t (it’s annoying but I can’t stop myself from finishing everything I start even if it takes years.)
Thank you, it's a good story
5689101 I used writing as a window into my soul. I wanted to write about sunshine and rainbows. And when I finished writing, I had this story in front of me. It made me realize just how fucked up my mind is.
I believe that some fucked up things can only be written by a fucked up mind.
5689102 I'm glad, and surprised you liked it.
Didn’t think it had NSFW.