Blog 006 : Epiphany On Scene Building · 4:17am Sep 11th, 2021
so...I realized as I was rewrite my shortys for today that...when I imagine a scene in my mind. If I allow it to settle their then begin writing...honestly the word's as far as one text goes...pretty good.
Now the data is minimal but, i am optimistic.
My scene was a pony looking at figures marching, they were lock step.
Then with image in my mind I wrote this.
No editing.
Or finangling.
It took me about fifteen minutes of concious, deliberate writing.
Scootalo, Rainbow, and Sweetie all had eyes for the shapes moved in slow lines, back to back, across the gardens.
They had bald head's that glinted blue under the morning sun. Some kind of cloth, not clothing, wrapped tightly around there body's so tightly that what came
And went
And came again...was...
"Is it grown?" Scoot's voice trailing, they stiffed, eyes and ears straining against the loud, sticetto of there boat's to hear a whine, and pop of the boomstick. Would they feel it? Would one escape able in those last moment's know with cold certain that her friends where dead.
That more then anything made them draw closer still. Flank to flank. Cutie mark to cutie mark.
Bird song, Hunter Swallow by the sound warbled in the distance. A street seller started screaming and beguiling uneager customer's.
Rainbow's turquise eyes went to the sun watching it's low lazy flight across the blue horizon.
They blinked, Scoot's hoove rubbed light circles into wet green of the bush, no justle of branches thick with dew, only a circle, a hazy left right, left right.
Rainbow looked down and to the left. She saw a hint of orange.
Scoot's. She thought with tremble.
I can't protect you.
Now this might go into a novel or it might just stay here. Either way I think this a breakthrough in my understanding of craft and action when it comes to writing. Since there is different feeling in my brain as I write stream of consciousness then just...say with a scene in mind.
In my onion the results are there.
Have a good morning! Hope those among you at work have a swell path before! And you eat some yummy food!
