a bit on sunsets sunken ruins (spoilers if you have not read it yet) · 4:33am Jan 11th, 2021
Hello! thanks again to any who read through the story. i hope you enjoyed it!
I got the idea when coming across the few artworks of sunset shimmer as a siren. Its an interesting idea
i have not seen much of around. i have not seen anyone tackle this idea as a story either, so i thought i might give it a try.
Considering i have not done to much writing i thought it would be good practice as well. id appreciate any feed back given.
It took a few days to write and edit, spending a lot of the day doing it. I'm not quite sure how long it normaly takes for other writers.
the story is a bit open ended but i think it works as it is. it might be possible to continue it in the future, explaining how she gets back to equestria. That is a bit of a bigger project though so I'll see how it goes in the future. Seeing how people react might help with how to go about that.
Also a strange thing i noticed was that when the chapter was uploaded a few of the sentences had massive spaces between the words
that were not there in the actual document. They only went away when the sentence was rewritten to be different. Any ideas why that happens? another minor thing i noticed was uploading the image caused an error if it was a PNG.
Also a slight side note for Artoria the death knight. While i still want to continue it at some point it needs to be fixed up.
i also need to spend more time figuring out where its going to go in terms of story.
Thank you again for reading. I hope you all have a good day!
Fimfiction's formatting can be a bit weird. Though the reader has a lot of control over that, it might have more to do with your specific viewing preferences, namely the alignment.
Anyway, was an interesting read so far, got me hooked on what happens next. Though you certainly also have me worried for Sunset's near future prospects, especially her treatment at the hooves of her fellow pony and what her new instincts and magic might compel her to try. I can also imagine her eventually finding herself swimming up river into ponyville, frightening and scaring a few ponies there half to death, while nonchalantly asking them to just go fetch the Princess already.
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interesting. i did not know there was a way to change how things are viewed. except the option for night mode being displayed.
Im glad you enjoyed the story!
also yea, how being a siren affects her is something i wanted to cover over time. i was planing to cover her journey back and explore outside equestrian a bit with her before she gets back to ponyville. though yea i can see the residences reacting that way.