Very Mixed Reactions on the latest chapter

Wait to pass judgement until chapter 9! I promise it will all make sense then....

Okay, probably not, but more will make sense then. Thanks for reading!

Comments

[Lucky Seven]

Hey, I liked it!

My name is Andrew, so I have to like it!

[NorthernSprint]

well... that IS the job of the author
hehehe...

EDIT: but i did like it, very much in fact

[Fizzy Orange]

I liked it too! Keep writing what you want, it's not like those who didn't like it can fire you or something.

[Professor Plum]

It felt ham-fisted to me, what with those flashbacks. I'm fairly confident I can predict exactly how the next chapter will go, thanks to them.
As the saying goes, "Show, don't tell".
Not bad enough to unfollow mind. Just a dip in quality compared to the rest of it.

[NorthernSprint]

536937 [youtube=gqMHZOV4fLo]

[Vexy]

I love it!

Don't let 'em tell you otherwise, Joe!

[Fierce Feline]

I loved it!

[Ekhidna]

ah loved da chapter, I just knew this chapter was going to be completed during the next chapter =D

[Woadbearer]

Was a fine chapter.

Harsh, unyielding judgment shall be reserved for now. Keep up the good work!

[Flutters Glasses]

There was absolutely nothing wrong with the chapter; it's likely that people just don't want to subject their brains to the awkwardness that next chapter will likely entail.

[NorthernSprint]

536982 yeah, i understand your logic dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Cloudchaser_dealwithit.png

[Uke-Joe]

536940 Psychic!! Prove to us your psychicness by telling us where it's going, then!

536958>>536956>>536953>>536942>>536937>>536934>>536936 Why thank you!

And if anyone who reads this is freaking out over ponies first date = sex... well that's pretty much how it is irl.

Hay babe lets haf sex
okai

I feel it works. There's really no established mating rituals in the mlp world, so I'm free to invent my own, aren't I?

And with the flashbacks, those were more to elaborate on the pony culture. Not planning on making them a normal part of this story.

[Flutters Glasses]

536991 Perhaps I'm being a bit hypocritical considering the fact that I both hate reading those situations and yet I'm one of those people that write them.

[NorthernSprint]

537009

Hay babe lets haf sex
okai

hehehe... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png

[Burraku_Pansa]

537009
Making up your canon's mating rituals is fine. Shoving it in our faces a problem, though; that's not the best way to handle most things when it comes to writing.

[iloveportalz0r]

536934 YOU STOLE MY NAME

[Uke-Joe]

537316 I see your point. In my defense, I'm still a relatively inexperienced writer and am learning as I go. Not to fear, this isn't going to turn into clop. In hind sight it probably would have helped things had I just extended the current chapter into a slightly longer chapter which will now be what is chapter 9. I think that would have made the whole thing better. Not fixed, but better. I could be wrong though.

[Burraku_Pansa]

537403
No no, I feel I'm being misinterpreted. While, yes, turning the story into a clopfiction would be a bad idea, as it would alienate a lot of people who didn't sign on for that when they first favorited your story, that wasn't at all what I meant. I was referring to the fact that by the end of Drew and Fluttershy's scene together, I already had an adequately solid idea of what had been misunderstood between the two of them and what that would mean for the next chapter. But you didn't stop there; you shoved in two additional scenes on the subject as though you weren't sure your audience could follow what was going on without them. And in the second one, Rarity flat-out has an inner monologue about the difference between human and pony mating rituals. Hence, shoving it in our faces.

[Uke-Joe]

537549 OOHHHHHHHHHhhhhhhhhh...... Yes, I wasn't entirely sure everybody understood it until the scene with Rarity, although if some people had assumed it by the end of the first scene, I can see how it would be repititive. Nonetheless, I feel ot shouldn't take too much from the story overall.

[Thegodhand]

I suppose with ovulation being a known quantity instead of being hidden like with human women sex would probably be a much more casual thing since they don't need to fear surprise pregnancy. Add on top of that the idea that there is no cannon saying that ponies had all the sexual repression that humans have had in culture than it is even more likely they would bang casually.

[Lies and Flies]

Well, I liked it. Awaiting the next chapter!

[Omega Weapon]

536934 Looks like I'm not the only Andrew reading this one then

[Ekevoo]

My first reaction was a flabbergasted "oh no, he went there…"

I did decide to hold my judgement until after this all plays out though.

Cultural differences are a pretty awesome theme for me, as I've lived across the world from my hometown (even though mostly latitude-wise) and then back to across the country and found more cultural differences now where I live today, within the same country but on the other end from where I originally hail from.

[cgkiwi777]

NEED MOAR. MAAAOOOORR. RAGGHHHH