Jun
16th
2020
I am curious... what do you think is happening in my Doom of Griffonstone story. · 3:10pm Jun 16th, 2020
I'm trying to be creative and leave little hints of things I have planned. This started with the old crow griffon warning to Gilda.
Now I'm writing the payoff of some of the hints of Hans backstory. I'm curious what you all think what is happening? Do you have any theories forming?
I won't give any spoilers I'm just curious if the 'hints' I been leaving in earlier chapters are paying off.
My current theory on what's happening:
Hans is a "real person" dumped into Doom's body. Doom is the manifestation of Hans' mental image of Doom. This would explain why Hans can't remember his name but remembers day to day boring stuff and Doom cannot remember what he ate last or when he last showered. Doom somehow has virtually ALL of the important bits of his knowledge filled in but all the day to day stuff is missing.
For this displaced/isekai, Hans was put in Doom's body, but he doesn't have the knowledge/mind to do anything effectively. So Hans was put into this Doom's mind as a vocal passenger.
As far as the "hints" go I haven't really noticed any, but I'll be the first to say I'm not that good at spotting subtle stuff.
That being said I've read one other story on this site, don't remember which one specifically, where the author had a related issue. Numerous chapters in the readers were completely blindsided. The comments for the chapter were filled with cries of "Where the hell did this come from? and It makes no sense!" The author said he left subtle hints throughout the story that alluded to the fact that this was going to happen.
The problem was that the hints were of a subtle nature that ONLY the author would notice. No one else saw these "hints."
I don't know if that will be an issue here. Where readers are going to be blindsided by something seemingly completely out of place for the story and characters.
My only suggestion would be to get an editor/pre-reader or 2 who does not know your plans for the story. If they're missing the "hints" then that's an indication that those might need reworking.
Hindsight is 20/20. If readers can ONLY get the hints once the thing the hints are about happens, they're not very good hints in my opinion.
If getting/noticing the hints is important or even required in order to understand/accept the future event they might need to be made more obvious.
If the hints are more along the lines of tiny tidbits that you would notice on a reread of the entire story and go "Neat, the author alluded to that important thing happening all along and I didn't see it. Cool." then they can be left as is.
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Thanks for the reply. There not anything world shattering going on in the hints. Doom not a subtle type of character.
The paintings in the dream gallery tell a story they are just out of order. A major hint is what Hans said to Luna when she was looking at the Heart Attack painting. I be honest here I didn’t think of Hans history till chapter two. The meaning is revealed in chapter seven that I’m writing now.
There is reference to enchantments on the tree and idol that is important. This might be revealed in seven or eight it a big event.
Beyond that there aren’t any major things. The Hans is real and Doom is a construct. I’m glad that coming out right that is what I wanted to show.