Rewriting The Four Foxes? · 9:04am Mar 6th, 2020
Hey guys, I wanted to say that I'm really glad that you're enjoying The Four Foxes. I know it's been a while since I've uploaded but it's getting more new likes and favorites from people and I appreciate that you still like it. Thank you for your support. Now, the reason I haven't uploaded in a while is that I've been preoccupied. I've been busy with classes and working on two original stories that I'm really passionate about. But that doesn't mean I have forgotten all about the foxes.
My creative juices have been flowing again and I've been thinking about getting another chapter out, but looking back at the old chapters I noticed that it has some flaws. It's slow, the tense's keep switching back and forth, it feels unfocused to me, and I feel like the dialogue could be better. Not to mention it's got some cliches that I'm not really proud of using, such as Pinkie introducing herself in her energetic and friendly way, Fluttershy using her stare to get what she wants, one of the main OCs appearing out of the forest. I haven't even introduced the main antagonist yet. I personally feel it has some problems that could be fixed. To be honest, I didn't have much of a plan for this story, just an interesting idea. I had some semblance of a game plan but it was all in my head and most of it has been forgotten. However, when I started writing for my other two stories I've gotten better at planning and developing an outline. So here's what I'm suggesting: I return to The Four Foxes but I rewrite the whole thing from scratch. I mean, the first four chapters will remain the same, more or less, but the rest of the execution will be different. I'll most likely take out the part of Kichiro working on Applejacks farm or Fluttershy using her stare on Reiko. The point is if I return to this story I'll have to start over with a better focus and a better understanding of the characters. Plus, there's a lot of setups, jokes, and interactions I want to use but haven't got the chance to. This also means it will take more time for the chapters to come out if I'll be rewriting them while working on my original stories and focusing on classes. Either that or I continue with what I have.
What do you guys think?
I haven’t read your story yet, but I’m deeply interested in doing so.
Believe me, I’ve been into this kind of position before. For one of my stories, I had to bring an editor in because I received comments saying that the sentence flow wasn’t working right. And for my first two stories, I discovered that I was jumping in and out of the past and present tense and had to change it to just one. For them, I chose the present tense.
I’d say go for it. Re-work everything into what it is that’ll make you proud of it.