Story Decisions

So, clearly my first major attempt at writing a sorta-serious story in a 1st person POV was not as popular compared to my other stories so far. I'll be honest, seeing it earn a thumbs down for each thumbs up during the first night I published it is a little concerning on my mind.
Although, I figured writing a story with more of the darker edge I wanted to perfect would be better in the long run compared to the other one I have saved on my drive. Basically came down to "Do I want a sorta 'King in Yellow scenario' or EqG Lyra switching places with Pony Lyra and both causing headaches for their respective Bon-Bons?"

I think you can tell which one sounded better to me and seemed more coherent to me.

Comments

[The Weaver]

I'll be honest: 'A Girl and Her Pony' is more of a niche story in it's appeal. Your main character does kind of die, even if Law Book kept the same core personality. Mind rape (willingly as it was), casual beastality and portrayal of humanity (correct as i feel it was) are some reasons people will down vote.

I loved the story. Leads up with a sequel hook; will Katie look into the disappearance of her friend? Will it end with her on all fours?

Big question that bothered me; What was Sky Dancer doing while Law Book was at work? Seems kinda boring to wait around an appartment all day. At least one day she was baking. But that doesn't require a whole day.