Reworked Chapter One · 7:59am Jan 6th, 2019
I took some advice and cleaned up Chapter One of Mother Moon, Daughter Nightmare. The pace is still a bit fast but thinking about it I'm not going to go nuts trying to flesh it out more. With nine characters and it being just after the Action Scene in the episode, the face pacing does make sense.
Going forward there be less clutter as the story focuses on Princess Luna, Nightmare Moon (being renamed Nightshade), and Celestia. Other characters will be just background or minor characters.