Four villianesses vs DUsk shine, Updates And Future Commisions

So, I have half the story of FVvDS half way done...

Problem is... I need help with the smut. Now, a lot of people commented how Eris chapter was dark to a point where it killed the mood and I half wondered were it went wrong. (Comment below how it went wrong)
And I wish to avoid that mistake. This chapter, I had planned to be a bit dark, but with the intention of just story development. The tags stay were they are at because... that is not the whole story but thanks to site restrictions, it ruins what I had wanted to make the story. Eris, Chrysalis, Silhoutte and the final chapter, will be really dark... as a story can without hitting the dark tag to make it needed. One thing that comes up though is that because the intention was to convert Dusk(As stated in the first and second chapters) into one of them, this needed to go dark.

Now, I need help to avoid that, while still going to deliver a clopfic. Any volunteers are needed.

What comes next might interest to a point. I will be opening a commissions for any who seek it.
1. I will be offering to do commissions for stories about $5 every 5 pages or equals about 2500 words. Now, I can also do a rough draft with about a page and a half of story for $2 but both options wouldn't half any major edits or real grammar check.(Hence cheap)

2. I will be asking for artists to do commissions on future installments on stories. Cover arts and in-story art. I don't wish to continue to use the same artist over and over again because I like to give different artist a chance in the spotlight. The first I wish to do so with, is the Dragon Lord's Consort and the second would be Spike's Life. Those two are my main priority with the sequel to FVvDS next and two upcoming installments.

That covers the jest of it. So, any whom wish to gather more info, PM, and I will get to you when I can. Meanwhile, expect Dragon Lord's consort to hit sometime next week as well as snippets on upcoming stories.