Srs Story For Competition

SO! I wrote a new thing. It's kinda cool I suppose, if more on the serious side. It's my attempt at world creation through changing a key-point in history. My concern is that the story focuses too much on the characters and not enough on how the world surrounding the isolated event changes as a result. As in, instead of building a world, I'm showing how a world reacts, so thus how a world CHANGES.

TFeathers

• MLP: FiM
• Dark
• Drama

When the pegasi lose their feathers, they also lose the ability to walk on clouds. The answer to 'why' is lost to time. The real question is... what happens to Cloudsdale?

• Death
• Suicide / Self Harm
• Twilight
• Windy Whistles
• Bow Hothoof

Flutterpriest · 2.5k words  ·  218  11 · 3.2k views

Ah well. It was a fairly fun read. I don't think it's my best work, but I love writing serious stuff. Makes me feel catharsis for when I'm considered a clop author. haha.

Anyway, check it out n stuff.

Comments

[The Abyss]

when I'm considered a clop author

Heh, I've never heard of anyone labeling you as a clopfic author.

[anonpencil]

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It happens. All. The. Time.
Like, every week.

[FamousLastWords]

Bruh, all this writing and whatnot. Save some pussy for the rest of us!

[Themaskedferret]

What's wrong with being a clop author? Not being facetious, I'm genuinely curious.

[Cynewulf]

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priest knows the weight of his many sins

[Themaskedferret]

4767305 Pfft, such cruelty.

[Cynewulf]

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my love compells me to rebuke The Vicar of Anonshire

[HumanSVD]

Get back to office love. Must know how that one ends.

[Flutterpriest]

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It's complicated and I'd rather not get into it. But I'll say that it's mostly me, my brain, and personal issues. And if someone wants to be called X or Y, no big deal! Awesome for you! I think that's awesome. But I have trouble with being called X or Y or Z.