Tiny Story preview. · 9:50pm Nov 8th, 2017
So, here is a story I'm working on (the preview, I mean) note, I am not saying that I am 100% sure that it will be approved. However, that does mean I am working on an Story. Here is a preview:
"He growled as his magic proved no effect against the barriers. Growling, he tried again. Then Again, then Again. continuously, he would fire magical beams at the invisible barrier that only he could see. After several minutes, he stopped, panting angrily. The stallion was quite indiscernible in the darkness of where he was. Once his panting subsided, Quiet reigned. He hated the quiet, oh how he wanted to destroy it. There was nothing he could do about it now however. His power was limited here, almost completely stripped from him. Once upon a time, long before this, he was the most powerful being living. Only when several lead sorcerers worked together was he defeated. Banished to this dark, quiet place for eternity.
He growled silently as he laid on his stomach, thinking about how close he was to succeeding before he was banished. Oh how he was so tantalizingly close, only needing to defeat the old fools. His overconfidence and arrogance had been his undoing. He believed them to be far weaker even if together only to be proven wrong. That was a mistake he would not make again. He heard hooves walking toward him. His crimson red eyes stared menacingly at the one who was walking toward him. The being backed away. The stallion snorted. Weak. he thought. His followers had been banished here with him when he was defeated, but they had neither the strength nor ferocity that they should’ve had. He could feel his power slowly returning however. He would not need these fools that much longer.
1,000,000 years The stallion growled internally. Banished to this area for so long, he knew something would attempt to stop him once more. There would always be a threat to himself. Still, there was those in the living world that could be convinced to aid him. He realized it was quiet once more. Quiet and Dark. He didn’t mind much now. Closing his eyes, he was able to see a young white Unicorn mare with a red pegasus stallion and a pink unicorn colt all sharing a room together as a family. It almost made him puke. Family made a being weak, weak with love. Weak with friendship. Weak in Magic. Magic he sensed that the unicorn was quite talented in. He focused on the unicorn for a minute. She was quite...interesting."
Thoughts?
Hm, a few capitalization errors, but overall it seems interesting