And... D'oh! Foot meet mouth.

Just got the word that I'd failed moderation again. *sigh* This time for having a short description that was TOO short.

I was trying to make it mysterious, and I suppose I did it too well. The frustrating part is that I could easily make the short description longer, but that would reveal and ruin the last second surprise at the end of the first chapter.

I'm not certain what to do. Any advice out there? If need be, I can set the password on the story and let folks beta it.

Comments

[Wanderer D]

What story was failed?

[EdBecerra]

4668420
A follow-on to RKStriker's Hasbroverse stories, one written with his approval, and after finishing, with his applause.

But I'm told I'm not passing moderation, that the short description doesn't meet the standards. I rewrote part of it, resubmitted, and was told that I hadn't made any changes. But I did!

*headdesk*

I'm clearly doing something wrong here, but I honestly don't see what.

Oh. Right. Link.

D'oh!

Spoilered, so that I'm (hopefully) not breaking any rules (the FAQ is very confusing...)

Link

Password is RKHASBROVERSE, all caps.

[Wanderer D]

4668899 It seems from the notes on the admin side it's just a matter of rewriting the short description... an easy way to do it without spoiling anything is basically taking a bit of the long description into it:

Short Description: A slice of life in the Hasbroverse
Description:
Not all stories are about great heroes and grand villains. Some people just want to live and die quietly, without much fuss. Some actually get what they want.

Years later, the Day of the Broken Fang has consequences no one really expected. Not the humans, not the Cybertronians, not the ponies. And particularly, one colt who simply doesn't want to go to college.

A story set (with permission) in RK Striker's Hasbroverse.

could be:

Short Description: Not all stories are about great heroes and grand villains. Some people just want to live and die quietly, without much fuss. Some actually get what they want.
Description:
Not all stories are about great heroes and grand villains. Some people just want to live and die quietly, without much fuss. Some actually get what they want.

Years later, the Day of the Broken Fang has consequences no one really expected. Not the humans, not the Cybertronians, not the ponies. And particularly, one colt who simply doesn't want to go to college.

A story set (with permission) in RK Striker's Hasbroverse.

If that's all that needs to be changed, it shouldn't be a problem to pass after that.

[EdBecerra]

4668908
Okay, I'll try that. But not right away, as I seem to have ire'd the folks in charge of story moderation. And can't seem to understand how I did it.

Gods, I've become XxVoid_CowboyxX. :(

[Dan_s Comments]

As a past master of obfuscation (even when I don't intend it as such), stick with the literal truth, but told in a way that can be easily misinterpreted.

You're old enough to know of Space: 1999, Christopher Lee in Earthbound played Zantor a character who might have been channeling Celestia at her most regal and understanding. Yet the audience knew this was Christopher Lee and Space: 1999 NEVER had friendly aliens, yet after accidentally killing one of his crewmates, and endless provocations, Zantor never cracked. Yet the audience knew this was Dracula and other villians and were just awaiting when the Alphans would push him one step too far and he'd blow up half the base and kill or injure countless people. The revenge he did get was both subtle and also Celestia-like twist.

The point of the digression, get everyone leaning one way in the description, and then have the story lean the other. After a few moments of screaming, they'll say 'Okay should have seen that.'