Oct
11th
2012
ANAL REJECTAGE!!! · 4:14pm Oct 11th, 2012
I sent in a request to EQD to see if they would post up Uprising on the site. They said no, so now I have sent it to 2 review threads on ponychan to read through and give me tips on how to fix it. Does anybody else have any tips or suggestions? I'm slowly working on fixing the current chapters as well as doing the first edit of the next, so any input would be great :)
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silverlining · 264 views
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Merge chapter 1 with 2 and add traveling banter. Add what they find at the center of the city. Tone down the descriptions of torn apart ponies to one or two references so we use our imagination. Split the group into two's so you can develop the characters through one on one dialog (fim does this a lot). I like your pacing, good luck.
I'll think about the merging, and I'll work on the traveling banter. *SPOILER* They will split up at about chapter 5 or 6. *SPOILER*