Chapter 1

The original "My Little Unicorn" fic, as well as its Starfleet remake, are some of the worst stories ever told about another work. And it's sad, too, because I feel the overall premise has promise. Promise that I intend to make apparent. Pretty much every chapter will result in a blog where I talk about what I fixed, beginning with this one.

To start off, I'll begin by saying that most of the names of Mykan's OCs will be changed. The only ones I'm willing to keep, so far, are Lightning Dawn and Titan. And the only location name I'm keeping is Rainbow City; the other names are just kinda bunk (changing White Village to Diamond Village, for example). And for the record, the Grand Ruler will have some history in Equestria, but his overall backstory is being tweaked slightly. The most significant of which is his interactions with Celestia: I plan on making them different from their "love at first sight" original story. But for now, let's stick to this chapter.

I originally had some exposition based on what the Neo-Equestrian population is like, and how they adapted over the years, but I realized that was maybe a bit too much for the first chapter. I'm trying to decide where best to put everything so it doesn't come out of nowhere, but also doesn't truly bore anyone new. I have to thank my first viewers for pointing that out.

With that said, let's talk about our first two main characters: Lightning Dawn, and Crystal (formerly Krysta). Lightning is, sadly, the one I'm having the hardest time coming up with a consistent character for. I wanted to try and make him an idiot hero who matures into a great leader, but I figure that won't work with being a student of his planet's ruler. But I can't just make him a Twilight Sparkle clone; the original Lightning Dawn was one as is, and besides, Equestria's getting introduced later into the story as well, so it'll be especially redundant. At the very least, I gave him some traits such as never turning a blind eye to an innocent in need, and willing to step up for them no matter what. But I want him to have a specific archetype; if anyone could help me with that, it'd be most appreciated.

Thankfully, no such issues plagued Crystal. Now, Krysta was kind of a pointless character at first; she only existed to get captured and act as a female version of Spike. She may have been made into the queen of the fairies later, but her super strength is hardly ever capitalized on. If used right, she could essentially become a much more active version of Navi from Ocarina of Time (which she was probably based on). With Crystal, I did just that. She may have needed to be saved in the flashback, but other than that I plan on making her damsel moments less apparent. She's going to get into the action a lot more often, and I hope to make her at least have the slightest tinge of a personality, let alone a lot more.

Lastly, the flashback itself. I did this to give Lightning Dawn and Crystal some more chemistry together, as well as set up a subplot for the season (that being their amnesia). I'm a little bit proud of this, though I understand there were some issues no matter what I did; thank goodness for proofreaders, huh? But overall, I'd say that was likely the favorite part of the chapter; so much is shown, yet so little is revealed for later use.

Well, I guess that's it for this blog post. If anyone has anymore questions, feel free to ask them, and I'll answer as soon as I can. Thank you for your time.