My nose itches and it's not dust. For all I know, well, the story I just submitted has not that much of a hook. You already know the usual stuff: HiE, rule 63, X does Y, etcetera. But I feel, it's still not quite 'moving' in any other interesting way. Disproportionate lack of dialogue may be a reason.
Do not read ahead if you hate negativity, neuroatypical persons, logical fallacies and bad English.
I have an issue. It affects most aspects of my life, but that's already going into private fields. To aid in understanding, I will say I tend to edit the same thing about five to nine times, and it still smells bad after published.