Ok, I hate to admit it, but...

... I'm cringing at my own story.

Compared to my "Formation" story on Fanfiction.NET, "The Newest Displacer", in the beginning, that is, sucks enough ass to literally create a whirlpool of cringe or a tornado of shit.

Given I did have some help from my buddy DragShot on Fanfiction.NET for "Formation" (specifically editing it and being a pre-reader of sorts for me), but still.

I mean, at the beginning, especially the fucking prologue, it's a hurricane of cringe-y-ness atop a mountain of WTF.

Jesus Christ Almighty...

*sigh*

Guys, would you mind helping me out in making my story better? I really need the help.

Thanks,
Displacer.

Comments

[Dream Seeker]

What exactly are you looking for?

[TheDisplacerOfEquestrias]

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Help. Praying. God. Pre-Readers. Editors. FUCKIN' EVERYTHANG.

[Dream Seeker]

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Hah, I can't promise much, but I can take a look and see what I can do.

[TheDisplacerOfEquestrias]

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Tell me when you feel like you wasted about 10 or 20 minutes of your life when your done reading my story, big guy.

May the Russian/Slavic God of War, Jarrilo, be with you, my friend.

[Umbra Animo]

Well a reboot could work as well sometime thats the only way to save a story

[TheDisplacerOfEquestrias]

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I'm gonna need help...

[Umbra Animo]

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Well im busy with trying to write my own and collage but i dont mind lend at lest a voice to help

[TheDisplacerOfEquestrias]

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Thank you...

[Umbra Animo]

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You have discord(is a chat site built for writer artists and gamers

[TheDisplacerOfEquestrias]

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I used to.

[Umbra Animo]

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Look up my name from this site i use the same one on discord