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Mocha Star


I'm here to write my way into your hearts and infect your minds.

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May
16th
2017

Writing question · 8:20pm May 16th, 2017

About Camping, tingles before bed. random, but what'd you think about the perspective of the young mare in the story?
Pretty good, needs work?
Was I pretty accurate with the female experience and was it believable?

Can I get a real and honest review or two about this story?

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Comments ( 1 )

I really really enjoyed it, it was a lot of fun! I think you did a good job of making it empathetic and cute.

I don't know that looking for accuracy is the best idea here, given the kind of content it is. Getting a valid opinion on that would kind of, uh, require someone who probably shouldn't be reading the story to read the story. :unsuresweetie:

(really sorry about being the worst on commenting on the other thing, I'm procrastinating on a ton of stuff and it's kind of locking me down motivation-wise)

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