May
12th
2017
Got a review for The Memoir · 4:02pm May 12th, 2017
According to the review the story needs A LOT of work. So as I update the story I'll edit the past chapters as well. Also note the illustrations are done for chap 4. But yeah... The review had very strong opinions and criticisms of the story. But nonetheless points in the review made sense but no tact was practiced when presenting them. So I'll keep the review in a doc for myself and I removed it from the public space that is the comments. Thank you again for reading The Memoir. It means a lot.
Just out of curiosity, but what was the main beef the reviewer had?
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Grammar (which makes sense, edits have not started), alicorn OC, premise and execution, "edginess", and contradictions in the ethics and such. I have the doc still open in my phone but it sounds like he had an immediate bias against alicorn OC's. So what I can do is I can improve the grammar and the objectively bad stuff. All the other stuff I'd have to research more into to improve but I like the contradictions to the main character, it makes him more human. Also I'm not an ethics expert, so meh.
Hmm, well, the first part is kinda legit, I'm afraid. As for the inconsistencies, I agree with you. The contradictions are a part of what really sold the character as a person for me, so do please keep those. As for the philosophical stuff? I know there's a crashcourse: philosophy Series on YouTube that you can get through in a day or two that covers a good spectrum of philosophies and philosophers, just in case you wanted a quick refresher there.
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Thanks I'll look into that. And I know the grammer is pretty bad. I should have not posted a 1st draft as a story but I really wanted to post on FimFic again. But thanks again for your time reading. It means a lot. The story will only improve from here.