Feb
20th
2017
I, Monster: First teaser · 12:05pm Feb 20th, 2017
It was a dark and stormy--
(Violin whack!)
: No! None of that! Shame on you!
Okay, okay. Calm down! I won't do the purple prose thing, only if you stop hitting me with my own violin.
: I don't trust you enough, so I'll keep the violin at reach.
Just three lines, all already approved by Nightwalker.
: I don't trust him either.
Twilight Sparkle felt the ground under her hooves as they descended after casting the releasing spell. As she expected, the stone cracked and broke [...].
“Someone just made a Pinkie Promise,” She said out of reflex. Then she felt a small twitch in the back of her right hoof. “And it’s unclear if it’s honest.” She squinted her eyes.
The storm came back to Ponyville.
(Violin whack!)
Hmmmn...
Um... Passive voice in first line. Capital 'S' in line of dialogue ending with a comma. Double it's. Passive voice again at end of line with extra 'her eyes' (because, pray tell, what else would she squint)
Much work is needed, young grasshopper. Hop to it.
You have my attention.
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Yeah, that's the point. This is just a teaser. Most of those were made at 4 am.
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And there I thought I wasn't going to get pass the curiosity threshold.
Okay, I am very much intrigued.
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Just wait for the real fic.
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Yeah, but at this rate, it's starting to look less like Ponyville and more like Gotham.
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Thanks for the support.
Yessss, yeeeeeasss! It comes, my prrrrecious sequel. Prrrrecious, with blue cuddly undead abomination. Yusssss.
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Incoming!