An Update On New Story/ Story Idea

After consulting with some reviewers/proofreaders, I have decided to change a story idea in my story "Not a Pony" from the serious self-insert that it was going to be into a satire not self-insert about some typical things we might find in a self insert. The main reason for this decision is because while my intents on what I wanted to make "Not a Pony" out to be, a sad literature about finding happiness through friendship, was derived from a theme rather than a plot in which the theme fits into. On the most basic level, the plot would have never been anything more than a "Hey cheer up, bud.". And that didn't see right with me.

Instead of that, I will end up revising what I want to do with that piece of literature, creating a plot to drive the story and then using a backstory character to enact out the plot. In other words, I want to achieve a case of fit the theme into the story rather than the story into the theme. The latter put a set of restrictions on me that prevented me from creating an engaging plot, which is no bueno.

I'll need some more time fleshing out what I want to achieve in this story. Sorry about that, but I want it to be as engaging as my skills will allow it.

The satire, on the other hand, is whole story altogether now. I shall collect data on things that we can potentially find wrong in self-insert stories (comedic ones don't count), and please feel free to add in information or correct any information I already have if I am incorrect anywhere in my current set of findings.

What I have so far is as follows:

1. Pointless or unrefined dialogue
2. Seemingly God-like powers (this includes either surviving normally ridiculous levels of damage to their body or the ability to overcome any obstacle, thus eliminating dramatic tension any and everywhere.)
3. Gets their mare/colt friend after only a few exchanges or relatively little build up to emotions of love.

The plot of this satire shall be:

Tim tries to get home after being transported from his dimension by Discord. All Tim wants to know is. Why him? Now, I am going to intentionally leave out what dimension poor little Tim is from, the idea being that he could be from any universe.

The plot is simple, but it covers the common trope of using Discord, or some other God-like being, as a plot device to transport a character and then never using said device again.

Now, to give it a comedic flair, I shall dress up the story with an idea from a real book series, "A Series of Unfortunate Events", and give my story a narrator. My reasoning for doing this is because I am making my character mute. See list above for reason. I figured having a narrator, in conjunction with focusing more intently on the physical aspects of my character, would more than compensate for the fact that he is mute.

I am curious to know if I have quirked your interests with this satire, or if I should refine my ideas some more to bring to the table for my new story. Let me know in the comments below!