It is Done! · 12:08am Jan 20th, 2017
I have finally done it, I have redone the First chapter of my story. I am hoping it is much better fleshed out. After all, I have had numerous responses to try to fix it. I am done editing it. I added a few things.
First of all, Faust is introduced. Many people probably were confused about this unknown character. She had been mentioned in passing, so I felt I had to open it up to you all. Consider this a bonus for those who have been so patient with me. Faust is integral for numerous things, which i won't talk about here.
Next, I added a tad more dialogue and what Discord had been thinking majority of the time. Discord is also a slightly more important character in his role in the story. I made Him a little more like he was supposed to be. Later on there will be some interesting things happening that Discord is responsible for. Again, I will not go into further details.
Luna has a few more speaking pieces, Some of the Mane 6's dialogue has been changed. Just to name a few. I really hope that I did a lot better at this, and hope people will like it. thanks again for your feedback and such. I look forward to starting chapter 4. It's going to be a doozy I can tell you.
