Nov
28th
2016
Didn't want to do this... · 1:15pm Nov 28th, 2016
I didn't want to make a blog post about this but everyone keeps commenting about it so I'm gonna go ahead and say it here. The next chapter will have Celestia still unhappy with Sunset. That's not gonna go away. And the Sirens aren't gone. I haven't written them out of the story just yet.
In all honesty, I thought people would totally get why Sunset wouldn't tell Celestia about the 3 Sirens that kidnapped because Sunset is a pony. I'm pretty sure she wants to keep that a secret. Why else did she keep it from Lyra?
Guess I just hate this latest chapter so much that I honestly think about it. I didn't realize Sunset has to give a bunch of reasons for something like that.
why would she have to tell anything about being a pony just saying she was abducted would be enough
i dont mean to harp or anything
4320528 I know. But Celestia would want to know more. Do you think Sunset could get away with lying to Celestia?
4320534 a simple i dont know why they attacked me would cover that
4320536 Eh...I'll just go over it next chapter. It'll be easier on myself
4320547 ok i just hope you dont hit more writers block by having the sirens still out there planning as you could end back where you where
4320551 Sirens will be back much later...though I have an idea or two but it won't involve just them like I did here. Just trying to make sure to not write myself into a corner.
4320559 then i look forward to it i just dont want you to hit the same wall is all
And the whole magical beings would not go well with the police
4320566 True.
Well all she would need to do is say she never saw there faces and that she has no idea why they abducted her.
Thinking on it more even if Sunset gave a full description it's not like the cops could do anything. Assuming there is no other evidence of the abduction even if the cops tracked down the sirens they could just use there powers to get them to drop the investigation.
Poor Sunset...aw well. Do what you need to do bud.
Yeah, I thought you'd have that problem.
I'd like to give you my two bits about it. I think the issue is that you didn't explain Sunset mind's process, more than explaining the reasons why she didn't tell Celestia. Remember, readers always tend to think characters acting dumb, or they taking bad decisions, under a stressful situation, is wrong; because readers know the big picture and have the time to think of a good excuse or something, thus, they think it is obvious which is the right course of action. Of course, the truth is that real people in real hard situations may act dumb, a good writer knows that. But you have to make it clear, the character feelings and state of mind is affected by what is happening, and that is why they make a bad choice.
Don't worry, we all know it was a hard chapter to write. Good luck with the next one.
4320820 Okay. I'm gonna still go and write Sunset a bit more in terms of her mindset with Celestia and all that junk. I just don't want to write myself into a corner.
Whenever I'm left wondering "Why did the character do that?" I just tell myself to keep reading and maybe it will be explained later.
4322083 I like doing that, but commenters apparently hate that though.