Sep
16th
2016
Thinking of rewriting "Equestria: Civil War" · 3:38am Sep 16th, 2016
Fast as lightning, sharp as a sword
I picked up "Cap 3" on Blu-ray yesterday and have watched it twice since then. And upon reflection, I'm starting to think the chief concerns with the fic (Celestia's characterization and actions) should be remedied instead of excused.
Would it be too terrible if I rewrote the fic, wrote Celestia out of the story and replaced her with a reasonable facsimile? A lot of people pointed out that the way I wrote it wouldn't be right, and I think doing this will make it better, or at least easier to handle. You think I should?
Just thought I'd ask.
Stay quick, stay sharp, and thanks for reading.
I think that's a good idea.
Also...
THAT AIRPORT SCENE!!
I think it would be better if you re-mixed those quotes into something she would say. Use them as a base for creating new lines. And have her stay in character while writing it. I think the main criticism people say is that she's too OOC, but she doesn't have a real "grounded" character to begin with, so there's a problem that needs a work-around.
My best advice is to have her in a strict-authority manner. But still have her caring and loving traits shine. Make her feel that she doesn't want to do this (If that's your plan). Especially to Twilight. Since she is her teacher after all.
Considering her attitude after the incident, I can get on board with her being rewritten more in character.
4212002 Right?! Right!?! RIGHT!?!?!
I say u should rewrite an better ur work. I pre ordered early time an i watched it to my hearts content. An celestias change of attitude would fit will in the story as sign of her believin she knew wats right but really is not.
Moon Dancer as the ex friend. Fits will asign the equestrians who joins this law. But later on Twilight would see the truth of the up comin events.
For the character who plays role as panther an spider man i wish u luck.
But the key to this story "UNITED WE STAND" an "DIVIDED WE FALL"
Good luck.
-Dreadwing45
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Iron Man: I don't care, he killed my mom.
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Captain America: I'm sorry Tony. You know I wouldn't do this if I had any other choice. But he's my friend.
Iron-Man: So was I.
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Spider-Man: Hey guys, you remember that really old movie, Empire Strikes Back?
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*Vision and Wanda*
(*SQUEE!!*)
4212175 Downey was at his absolute best in this movie. I swear, if I didn't know any better, I'd swear up and down this was the best performance of his career.
Also, Tom Holland fucking NAILS IT as Spidey!
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Yes.
And OH MY GOD YES!!
Still, overall, I think Winter Soldier was the better movie.
Still, Civil War was the more SATISFYING movie.
Although i can't say that I'm on bored with Ant-Man's costume change.
4212180 Winter Soldier was excellent, but to me, Civil War has everything WInter Soldier had, plus the powerful emotion, stronger character interaction, and of course, Spider-Man!
Oh yes, and Chadwick Boseman ROCKED as Black Panther.
I am fine with either choice about Celestia. But I personally think putting another pony, like Cadance, on Iron Man's role, instead of Moon Dancer, would be more logical and interesting. Cadance was indeed directly involved in several ordeals with villains, and her close bond with Twilight would make this confrontation bigger. Now that she has a foal, it would make sense for her not to want leniency towards villains to put her family in danger.
If not replacing Moon Dancer, I would still like if she joined the RARA side, for the same reasons.
Again, that's just a suggestion.
It's your story so I'm fine no matter which way you go. One thing I am curious about though is are you limiting yourself to only 6 members on each of the teams like in the film or in your story will they be much bigger?
4212309 I haven't quite decided yet. With just the Mane 6 and Moon Dancer, I don't have enough for 6 on each side, but if I bring in the characters I want, I'll probably have too many.
4212583 My personal opinion would be maybe to put the max at somewhere around 10 or 12. That would make it a nice even number without things getting too crazy. I'm personally hoping to see how the conflict will affect the characters we've seen around Equestria as they pick sides, like maybe a Wonderbolt or two on opposing sides, I can imagine seeing Spitfire supporting the law but someone like Soarin being against it. But I look forward to seeing your final take on this, it is going to be epic.
It depends. If Celestia isn't involved in the debate then her absence could look even more jarring than her acting OOC. I think you should think of a good excuse for her not to be there (like maybe a villain captures her, or she's just visiting a far away country on a diplomatic mission). If that won't work for the story, then just write her in her original role, but more IC. Personally, I felt that the biggest problem was the way Celestia blamed Twilight for things that weren't her fault. If you even just changed that part it would be much better.
I wasn't big on Celestia's characterization, but I think eliminating her from the story entirely would cause more problems. If there was a "Civil War" going on that split up the Elements of Harmony, wouldn't she get involved in that?
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An idea to add ponies in this. Once decided in which side the 6 are, you could put some ponies they, until now, were close to, in opposite sides. Here is just a suggestion :
Team A - Team B
Twilight, - Moon Dancer
Starlight Cadance
Rainbow, - Spitfire,
Soarin Fleetfoot
Pinkie, - Applejack,
Maud Big Mac
Trixie - Rarity
That would make 1 alicorn, 2 unicorns, 2 pegasususes, and 2 earth ponies in each team. The idea of these ponies going in a 7 on 7 brawl...
But up to you!
4215397 Not a bad idea. And it would make things a lot more even than I was planning. Good call!
Better late then never but I tought you should replace Princess Celestia with Miss Harswinny. She seems a better authority figure for your Civil War story. But I leave that choice up to you my friend. Good luck!
4219110 Actually, not a bad idea. I'd have to rewatch "Flight to the Finish" (I think that's the one) to remember her better, but still, that's a good suggestion. Thanks!