In Which Opinions are Sought · 2:35am Aug 11th, 2016
I have a question for anyone who follows my content, if anyone's up for answering it.
When I first started out on this site, one of the groups I joined was Thirty Minute Ponies. My first submission for the group was for the prompt "Ponies talk" and the short story in question is right here. I was (and still am) rather proud of it, and from time to time I go back to read it. For something I wrote out in thirty minutes, I don't think it's too bad.
Now here's the question.
I know what my current plan is for writing--I want to get up that RariShimmer soul mate AU one-shot (hopefully getting it started this weekend), then a chapter of Now You Need Us, and finally a romance/comedy Sunlight one-shot inspired by my good friend and partner in crime Moczo. However, from time to time I've contemplated going back to this short and fleshing it out into a full fledged one-shot of its own and posting it to my account, but I can't make up my mind if an expansion would be a worthwhile use of my time.
Would anyone be interested in seeing me try that, or do you think the short is good as it is?
Wow, that was actually really good for 30 minutes.
If you feel like you can do it, I'm all for expanding the submission into a full one-shot. I'm definitely interested.
I like that short, and it does stand on its own, but I'm all about Sunlight, so I'm always happy to read more about them. As for whether it'd be a worthwhile use of your time? I guess it comes down to how much time you have, and what you consider the highest priorities. If you've got time to spare, go for it!
I doubt you'll have a hard time finding people interested in this story. It uses Twilight's title in an interesting way (certainly not positive, but not exactly negative; just something she'd realistically have to deal with), and provides a great chance to show off the dynamics of their relationship. Purely speaking of my interpretation of these characters here, but Sunset once wanted the spotlight Twilight has, while Twilight did not. It's open to interpretation whether or not Sunset still wants that, but I imagine part of her does. Similar to Just For Popularity, in a way. It stands to reason she'd be better equipped to handle the pressure (and we all know how Twilight can be when put under pressure). A story like this could show how they can both work to help one another; Sunset helps Twilight cope with her newfound spotlight, while Twilight helps Sunset stay grounded with any spotlight put on her as Twilight's lover. Although, of course, that would be in the context of a return to Equestria fic.
Anyway, getting off the topic of my rambling about something that I'm sure you have your own ideas for, I think the better question is how interested you are in writing it. Your readers will enjoy it, but we would also enjoy most anything you choose to write, you're the one who has to put in the time to tell the story. Although, considering how long the idea's been bouncing around your head, I'd say you're probably pretty interested
I don't know that there's all that much you could add to this piece... I mean, yes; you can add words, and you could turn it into a proper tale by replacing the 'telling' exposition parts with some dialogue that demonstrates the same information... but in terms of substance I think it's already hit all the important notes. Adding more and expanding it would only serve to sort of... 'dilute the impact', I guess is the best way to phrase it.
Mind you, that isn't to say that you wouldn't have gobs of readers throwing green thumbs at you if you did,
This was very good, but was clearly written to accommodate the time limit. A version that wasn't freeze-dried into a block of exposition would be fantastic.
I agree wit what FanOfMostEverything is saying. A refurbishing of the piece would be nice. Also, if you want to make the time, there is definitely room for expanshion. you just need to figure out what the plot is beyond twilight escaping rumours. or if that is your continued point, how does it effect sunset and twilight's relationship? Either way, I enjoyed the little story and would like to see more. hope this helps!
Get that short into a real story so it can be loved by all, silly.