What The Hay Is Wrong With Cerealkiller78?....Also new stories! · 10:45pm May 13th, 2016
Soooo....with the unfortunate first day turnout for Trial, I'm sure some people are wondering what the heck is wrong with me? Is all that I write dark and dreary?
Well, fear not! I have four new stories in the works that will be completely comedy based and random.
Here is a list of their titles, and short summaries....
Dial B for Bon Bon.
-Will take place immediately following the events of the friendship games. Lyra and Bon Bon have a sleepover, and get spooked when a stranger with a deep voice keeps calling Bon Bon's house.
What the Fling?!
-Certain events following the Spring Fling have Rarity and Sunset looking at themselves through each other's eyes....Literally!
The Zany Misadventures of Professor Discord
-I think the title speaks for itself...
Shadowbolts Shenanigans
-Everything Shadowbolts!
I can't say when any of these stories will be released. I'm still working on Silent Night, and working a full time night shift.
All writing time that I have as of now is going towards Silent Night. With the poor first day turnout for Trial, I'm putting that story off to the side.
Can people at least leave comments saying what they didn't like about it? Was it just that the second chapter didn't fit well with them? Or is it just not written well?
Until next time!
Well, I liked that the Sirens attacked the Rainbooms before they had the chance to really get going.
I crack jokes all the time about how most of the villains on the show would have won if they had just finished the job instead of letting Twilight and the others gain momentum.
Sadly, everything kinda went downhill for me after Sunset and the others got caught caught by the students.
I thought it was a tad bit random that Aria and Adagio were carrying knives like that.
I understand that that's supposed to be a core piece of the story since the main idea is that Twilight's dead and Sunset was found covered in her blood ... but it still felt ... off.
And then there was the part with Twilight.
Believe it or not, you don't die immediately from a slit throat.
Depending on how deep the cut is, you can still hang on for a few minutes.
But that's what suspension of disbelief is for.
If you were considering making some changes to the first two chapters then here's a possible idea.
What if Twilight was still alive and got pushed through the portal along with Sunset?
Some of Twilight's blood could spill onto Sunset that way.
And if you have a slit throat then you lose oxygen, as well as blood, so I'd imagine that Twilight probably wouldn't even be able to talk anymore, let alone explain the situation to anyone.
What if right after they got back to Equestria and the portal got sealed, Rainbow and the others walked in by chance and saw Sunset standing over a bleeding and almost dead Twilight?
It could work given what little they know about Sunset.
They could argue, "She already tried to harm Twilight once and failed, so plan B was to gain Twilight's trust, and then go for round 2 the moment her back was turned."
Everything else aside, try not to let the like/dislike ratio get to you.
Some of that might have been in response to Twilight getting killed off.
Oh wow, that is an amazing idea! If you don't mind, I might just end up using it...