New End

So we all know I took forever and a half to update Sweetie's Shadow. Believe you me, I wanted to update the story for a long long time, but I couldn't get the chapter how I wanted. Finally, after basically finishing the update, I sort of rushed the last part and it's very noticeable.

After someone pointed it out, I re wrote the final portion of the chapter. If ya'll felt like the ending to chapter 29 wasn't up to par, do give it another read as I've edited it slightly .

Comments

[Biker_Dash]

Will go do so now, not because I was displeased with the chapter ending, but because it has changed, and I wish to see the changes made.

[Dirty Bit]

I personally didn't feel it was rushed, but I'll check it out anyways.

[Blade Star]

I got what was being hinted at in the original version, but it's much clearer now. It's an interesting idea bringing Discord into things like that, though I honestly wouldn't have minded if that memory was further elaborated on in a later chapter. The only thing that sort of throws me is the idea of Slice (or was it Dice? I've honestly forgotten ) being executed. If the ponies didn't execute Tirek (which I certainly wouldn't mind ), it seems odd that they should go for capital punishment here. Not a criticism, just an observation; it's your universe after all.

Anyway, good chapter as always. I look forward to when this story updates.

[Midnight Sonare]

I didn't think that the first ending was rushed. Although I have to admit that this new ending is way better.

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I don't know. It feel to me like an eternity imprisoned is worse than being executed. Of course there's always the possibility of escaping, but if he don't manage to do it he would be trapped (probably alone) for the rest of his life. And we don't know how much lifespan Tirek has.

[Pathos14489]

So uhhh... How's the next update coming, Mr. Sketch?

[Solid Punch]

Two years since last update... Could you please hint at when next update will be? Or if you're still with us?..

[Solid Punch]

Note Sketch? Are you here?..

[Holydude]

It would be nice if you continue your sweetie's shadow fic. But if not at least tell your readers why?

[Redundant]

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The guy hasn’t been online for about three years.

Hope is falling.

[Holydude]

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Yeah I know what you mean. I loved his version of sombra