Critique Review: My Little Smash Bros. · 7:14pm Feb 24th, 2016
Hello, everypony! I am the Critique.
Fire Emblem Fates came out about a week ago. The adventure that will take you through the various lands! Align yourself with allies! Face off against your enemies! With sword in hand and your friends at your side you march to your foes castle and give a great cry of-
Yeah, I don’t own a copy yet.
They were sold out at my local gaming retailer and with finances being what they are and with a convention coming up, I won’t be able to afford it until a month later. You people have probably already beaten the game several times and are all ready to spoil the entire plot of the game. Jokes on you though, I know the big plot twist at the end. The butler did it.
But I guess that’s a good thing because lack of Fire Emblem has left me time for reviews. And it is the last week of Fire Emblem month before we go back to what these reviews should really be about. Ponies.
Before we close this book on Fire Emblem month, let’s review one last fic, shall we? In keeping with the theme of talking about Ike, I looked for a fic that talks about him… And I couldn’t find one. Or at least one with enough material to work with.
But I did find a Smash Bros fic. And Smash Bros has Ike in it… So it’s kind of Fire Emblemy. Good, I’m glad we could all agree on this.
Let’s dig into My Little Smash Bros: Clashing Worlds by Supermariosoniclover and SuperNintendoGameboy
The story begins with the heroes of Smash, the Main Six, Spike and the Cutie Mark Crusaders battling some kind of ultimate enemy that they have no idea if they can defeat or not.
Well, the story doesn’t waste any time, does it?
Palutena declares that this never would have happened if they hadn’t interfered with Mobius, the home of Sonic the Hedgehog.
We then cut to…
*5 days before the encounter*
Ugh… This is going to be one of those confusing timeline fics, isn’t it?
It has been 2 months since the defeat of Hades: The Lord of the Underworld. Life was slowly but surely going back to normal, and Pit and Palutena were out exploring the worlds of their fellow Smash Bros. competitors.
Because I guess they can just do that. No, that’s a legitimate question. I’ve never played Kid Icarus.
Pit and Sonic don't know that much about each other. But they still get along pretty well and form a great team when necessary. Pit is excited to visit the blue hedgehog's planet. "So we're going to see Sonic? That's great, Lady Palutena!"
Good thing that the story told me that Pit was excited, because I won’t have been able to tell with his mannerisms, his dialogue, his tone, or his body language or anything silly like that!
Unfortunately, Pit doesn’t get to hang out with this BFF because it turns out that Mobius is under attack by Dr. Eggman. Pit and Palutena rush off to go help the blue hedgehog.
"I wish it were that easy this time, but I cannot stand by and watch this happen. We need to leave now!" Palutena didn't want to waste anymore time and insisted on helping Sonic before it would be too late.
Without questioning it any further, Pit agrees to help, "Yes, Lady Palutena!" And they set themselves for a course for Mobius. Sonic's world.
Yes, let’s say what Palutena said in the narration already as if we think our audience didn’t get it the first time!
Meanwhile, in Equestria…
Lord Tirek had been defeated just 2 months ago, and everything was going back to normal. Twilight grieved about her old home: "The Golden Oaks Library" being burnt to ashes every so often.
Yeah, libraries spontaneously combusting is a really bitch.
*One of the books on the shelf catches fire*
God damnit!
*Beats the fire out with his hoof and gets a good look at the title. God Empress of Ponykind*
Aw, man! I was going to read that one!
Twilight felt great having her own castle, as she felt like she had made a huge step in her role as a princess, and wishes to continue doing what Princess Celestia would like to see of her. Becoming a great ruler of Equestria, and to be the Princess of Friendship.
Well, she got over her depression of her old library fucking quick! Screw my home for four season, I got a fucking castle!
Knowing Pinkie all to well at this point, Spike was almost certain that Pinkie wanted to throw another party. "Probably another party I'm guessing--*burp* It's a letter from Princess Celestia!"
Wow, this story is really good at making me feel like it’s on fucking repeat. I thought as I explained to the audience how this story feels like it’s repeating itself.
Twilight makes her way to Sugar Cube Corner, where Pinkie Pie waits for them, she says to gather up the others and meet back there. Which begs the question, why couldn’t they all just be there and save us a scene?
Twilight knew that she needed to inform Pinkie of the news so wasted no more time in doing so. "Well I'm afraid this party's going to have to wait. Princess Celestia sent me a letter telling us to meet her in Canterlot right away! It's urgent! Find, Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash, Applejack and Rarity and let them know!!
Especially, Find! Everypony knows he’s the most important character in the show! I don’t think we’d have ever defeated Discord without Find! He’s so impressive!
Pinkie Pie has a brief scene with Rainbow Dash to explain things that are hardly plot related, so I’m just going to skip it. It’s weird because this scene doesn’t add anything that we couldn’t have added with them being at Sugar Cube Corner already. It just ends up waste a lot of time!
They arrive at Canterlot where they ask Princess Celestia what has happened. It turns out that there is no emergency!
I can see why Trollestia hasn’t exactly died out yet!
Celestia explains that she just wants them to help her with a spell she is working on and to see if the Elements of Harmony might be more effective than her normal magic. Question? Isn’t the Elements of Harmony locked in the Tree of Harmony? I know I haven’t seen season 5 yet, (I promise when Fire Emblem month is over), but I’m pretty sure that’s what happened after they beat Discord’s evil plants! And the story says that Season 4 happened, so I don’t really see where the excuse could be made!
Also, my question is, what did Celestia write to Twilight to make her panic like that?!
My dearest Twilight Sparkle
OH MY GOD! HELP! THEY’RE KILLING ALL THE SOLDIERS! NOW, THEY’RE FORCING LUNA TO DO AN INTERPRETIVE DANCE WHILE THEY THROW KNIVES AT HER! IT’S AWFUL! SHE’S GOT NO SENSE OF RHYTHM! SAVE US!
With love,
Princess Celestia
It turns out the spell she is working on is a dimensional travel spell. Ah, so Celestia is building her own TARDIS! I fucking knew it!
We then cut back to Mobius where Pit and Palutena are trying to help Sonic and his friends.
"I can see Eggman's base up ahead. Let's get a closer look."
"Yes, Lady Palutena."
As soon as he says that, a blue blur passes right by them.
"I think that was Sonic." Pit was pretty positive it was Sonic.
Was it Sonic?!
They run into Sonic (HOLY SHIT) and Shadow and they learn that Dr. Eggman is building a device to destroy the world or some shit.
"Dr. Eggman has stumbled upon old blueprints from his grandfather, Gerald Robotnik. Who was also my creator. And he plans on using them for a device meant to change the world for the better."
"In Eggman's case, that's no good.
… I’m sorry, I have to do this…
The fic compelled me, okay!
They infiltrate Dr. Eggman’s base using all their skills and powers combined to defeat all of Eggman’s robotic minions…
"Enough wasting time, let's get this over with!"
*After Infiltrating Eggman’s base*
"Ohohohohohoho! Well well, if it isn't Sonic! Long time no see! And you brought Shadow and...actually, who are they?"
Yeah, that once sentence and they’re in Eggman’s base! What the hell?! Mykan would be calling ‘bullshit’ on this right now!
I guess they used the ancient strategy of going through the front door and Eggman just waiting there to greet them!
Meanwhile, in Equestria, the Main six start to use their power over the Elements of Harmony (which are still in the Tree of Harmony, might I remind you) to power Celestia’s spell.
NEXT SCENE!
We go back over to Mobius where Sonic and the others battle Dr. Eggman. Before we cut back to Canterlot of a sentence and a half. Okay, this is bothering the hell out of me?! In other stories that want to switch back and forth between scenes like this happening at the same time, they’ve often used one chapter to set up one part and had another chapter to show the other part with them both ending at the same point when they come together!
This is not how you should do it! Switching back and forth between the two scenes every couple of sentences! It’d be like me cutting to other reviewers every other-
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Charlie squad goes on patrol, and it’s quite obvious that Dearing’s starting to lose it... which makes no sense since they haven’t done anything FOR ALMOST FOUR MONTHS!!!
“Dearing,” I said quietly. He didn’t respond. “Dearing?”
He blinked. “Jesus, what? I’m trying to think!”
I sighed. “Dearing, you need to pay attention. We’re in country.”
Now that’s the first intelligent thing you’ve said... except you’re still treating this like Vietnam.
They keep walking before stopping for a rest in an old maintenance shed. Dearing decides to go take a walk and doesn’t return for about half an hour.
... Please tell me something ate him. It would make this story much better.
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Wait, did I just get interrupted by that cat guy from-
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So, the episode starts with the CMC... oh God, are they using glue?! Don't they know what it's made of?! Christ, I'm gonna be sick…
YOU'VE REVIEWED A STORY WHERE A PERSON TORTURES, KILLS, AND EATS HER FRIEND…
One where I'm a nonsensical mass murderer of kids…
AN ANIMATION WHERE PINKIE PIE BRUTALLY KILLS HER FRIENDS AND DESTORYS THE WORLD…
... And the use of glue is what makes you wanna hurl? You have issues, Cynical.
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Isn’t he the one guy I did a crossover with to review Mysterious Mare-Do-Well?
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STOP INTERRUPTING MY REVIEW!
Anyway, the spell from the ponies, Shadow’s Chaos Control and Palutena’s magic cause an explosion that defeats Dr. Robotnic/Eggman/whatever and teleports the ponies to Mobius.
Twilight is the first to wake up and runs into Kirby, from the… um… Kirby series… A character named Tiff (who I guess is from the anime series that I never watched, so I know nothing about her) is also there. Twilight asks Tiff where she is since talking to Kirby is like talking to an infant.
"No, I come from a place called Equestria. Me and 5 others like me performed a spell that allowed us to travel to alternate worlds. I guess it worked since I'm here, but my friends are somewhere else. *gasp* Spike!"
THIS IS NOT SOME FUCKING RP, BRO! This is a fan fic! A written story! I do not want an asterisk used like this! An asterisk in a story like this is most commonly used to bring attention to important information. Such as a translated word or a place that we need to know about. I personally don’t like using it that way, because it can break the flow of the story when the reader has to glance down and see some information. Granted that information is usually optional and not imperative to the plot, but it does bother me.
"Who's Spike exactly?"
"He's a baby dragon, and my assistant. I almost forgot about him. I hope he's alright, and the others!"
Don’t worry about forgetting him, Twilight. Most of the brony community does.
Tiff and Kirby agree to help Twilight find her friends, with Kirby giving a smile in response.
To which, Kirby happily agreed to help with a very big smile.
"Poyo! ^_^"
I don’t know what mystical other language Kirby is speaking, but I’m pretty sure he just told Twilight to fuck off.
As they are about to set off to look for Twilight’s friends, they are set upon by Tuff, Tiff’s younger brother, I guess. (Again, never saw the anime and just going based off what I found on wikipedia.) Tuff explains that a small dragon appeared and fell out of the sky. Twilight assumes that it’s Spike he’s talking about and teleports them all to the castle of King Dedede. A castle that Twilight has never been to, nor has she ever seen it. I guess she can just teleport to any location she wants.
Nightcrawler would be called bullshit on this!
However, Twilight’s magic seems to have been drained by the dimensional portal spell, because I guess we have to depower Twilight so that Kirby can save her or some bullshit. And as if that wasn’t insulting enough, her wings stop working too.
Okay, I could probably buy that her magic isn’t working! Some energies of Equestria that powers unicorn magic bullshit! I would have bought that. But come fucking on! Her wings don’t work! What? Is this like why the lion king won’t help Elincia?! Because it would make the game too fucking easy?! They’re fucking muscles! Pit’s allowed to fly! Why not Twilight?!
Urrr! Anyway, back on Mobius, Sonic and the gang find a building in the middle of the plains and decide to investigate. As they do, they meet up with Rainbow Dash, who’s flight is also fucked up, because who in the Nintendo universe would want a strong female character!
… Okay then…
Suddenly, Dark Pit arrives, also called Pitoo, I guess. (GET IT?!) He explains that Skyworld felt a massive energy wave and came to investigate the cause of it. Rainbow Dash explains what happened when she suddenly realizes something important.
"Well the spell was extremely powerful, so we had to use the Elements of Harmony to pull it off. *gasp* MY ELEMENT! It's gone!"
Of course it’s gone! It’s in the fucking Tree of Harmony! … No, I’m not going to let this go!
When Ponyville was in danger, me and my friends use these necklace things to power ourselves up and stop whatever major threat shows up."
"So you think if you find your element and your friends, you can get back to your world?"
RD wasn't completely certain it would work. But they didn't really have much of a choice right now.
"I think so."
Or … maybe Palutena could try to send them home? She’s already proven that she can teleport other beings to other worlds. We’ve seen that!
Anyway, I guess our heroes don’t think that far as they spot Yoshi’s Island on the planet. Pit thinks this is odd and wonders how it got there. Turns out this is actually a rebellion on the Yoshis part after being mistreated for several years by Mario.
Pit and Palutena try to use their powers to make it to the island, but it turns out they’re powerless to. Is this like the Teen Titans ultimate test thing, where they have to beat the entire game without using their fucking powers?! Because that seems like incredibly lazy writing!
They head off for Yoshi’s Island to try and locate the Chaos Emeralds and the Elements of Harmony.
Back in Dreamland, we find Twilight, Tiff, Tuff and Kirby exploring the interior of the castle, on the way to the castle’s throne room.
Back on Dreamland, we find Twilight, Tiff, Tuff and Kirby exploring the interior of the castle, on the way to the castle's throne room.
Oh, great! Not only is the story repeating itself! It’s repeating me!
As they search for Spike, Tiff explains who King Dedede is and what he does. He’s apparently the ruler of the kingdom and is kind of a dick. Constantly ordering monsters to try and kill Kirby.
Tiff thought that much was obvious. Dedede is a incredibly unpredictable king, and nobody really knew what he would do next, but one thing was for certain. He always ordered monsters whenever he felt the need to attack Kirby. Which was pretty frequent.
So he’s unpredictable … in how predictable he is? … Hmm… I’m getting philosophical…
"This kind of thing would never happen back home. Believe it or not, I used to be just a regu-lar unicorn. But after displaying top magical abilities among any other unicorn, I became an alicorn princess."
I realize that could be just a typo but… How did someone not notice this?!
… How did you even make that?!
As much as Tiff declined to the idea of being a princess, she found it exciting to have found, not only a talking pony who was able to perform powerful magic and could fly, but also a princess. However this excitement was short lived, as they walked to where Tuff saw the dragon fall. But it was nowhere to be seen!
Yes, it is exciting to see the pony who can perform magic… that you never saw… and fly… for half a second… Dreamland must be incredibly boring if that’s all it took to impress you!
Okay, be impressed by this! I’m imagining myself pulling a rabbit out of my hat.
It turns out that Spike was found by King Dedede and his henchman, Escargoon. (GET IT, HE’S A SNAIL?!)
King Dedede tries to get a refund for the dragon from the guy he orders from or something, but when he tries calling them, the line is dead. One of his servants burst into the room and tell him about Twilight’s appearance. Dedede panics that Kirby and the others are after his dragon and hides Spike in a closet. And I guess Spike is either unconscious throughout this whole thing or the writer’s forgot to give him some dialogue.
… I pick the latter.
Twilight asks if King Dedede has seen Spike, but the king just shrugs his shoulders and says ‘I don’t know.’ Which Twilight totally buys. You know, if I was in a strange land with strange people, I’d probably accuse everyone of stealing my friend… Of course, I have to have friends first.
Anyway, Kirby finds the closest that Spike was hiding in and it’s only then that Twilight doesn't trust Dedede. Spike finally wakes up and when Twilight demands answers from Dedede, Meta Knight appears.
Meta Knight appears in the room with his usual mask and cape. He is a star warrior much like Kirby. He obeys the king, mainly to see when he will send out a new monster. He also uses it as an advantage to help train Kirby. Making him faster and stronger. Twilight scratched her head with her hoof, not knowing who this masked swordsman was
Thanks for the wiki! Sure glad that flowed into the story. And Twilight, if you had read the story, it just told you who Meta Knight is! Pay attention!
"Who's that?"
"It's Meta Knight!"
"He's a Star Warrior like Kirby."
YOU JUST FUCKING SAID THAT! YOU DON’T NEED TO SAY IT AGAIN!
Meta Knight explains that he saw Spike fall from the sky, along with a gemstone that Twilight assumes is her Element of Harmony. Twilight and the others go off to explore the forest where Meta Knight says the gem is waiting for them.
Our next chapter begins in the world of Smashville, the Animal Crossing world. I’ve never played an Animal Crossing game before and don’t honestly know that much about it. I’m sure it’s good. I’ve heard good things about it, it’s just not my cup of tea. But here’s what I understand about it.
It’s about a villager in a town of anthropomorphic animals. This villager happens to be the new mayor and helps keep the city prosperous and happy.
Anyway, the Villager’s secretary, Isabella, arrives to tell him about a new citizen who's just moved into town and that she recommends making the newcomer feel welcome. (The Villager doesn’t have a name, so I’m calling him Bob).
Bob decides that rather than do what the town wants him to do, he decides to go out and waste time by fishing. So, like most politicians. As Bob fishes, he catches the extremely rare Pink ie Pie fish.
Mmm… Looks like dinner tonight! Who likes cupcakes?!
When Pinkie Pie wakes up, Bob explains where she is. Through sign language, I guess? Bob doesn’t actually have any dialogue. The narration simply tells us what he’s saying to Pinkie Pie. I’m guessing this is something to do with the game itself. Bob is a silent protagonist. Still, I do find this rather clever. Since I just imagine Bob explaining everything by miming it and yet somehow, Pinkie Pie understands it perfectly.
And when she meets up with the other characters, Bob isn’t understood by anyone but the characters from Animal Crossing (obviously) and Pinkie Pie. With Pinkie playing interpreter.
I really hope that is what is happening here, because I do like that.
Bob takes Pinkie back to the village where everyone greets Pinkie Pie. Isabella explains that she saw three ponies like Pinkie appears around the same area. Although these ponies were much smaller.
Pinkie says she needs to find them and Bob and Isabella decide to join her in her quest.
Meanwhile, Applejack finds herself in a world of shrooms.
Applejack finds a castle in the distance and decides to speak to one of the locals there to see where she is. However, before Applejack can get too far, a large airship flies over the castle. And I think we all know what happens here.
"Mario! Help me!"
A Toad ran up to Mario and Luigi, and told them to hurry and save the princess.
"The princess has been captured! Mario, Luigi. You have to save her!"
As you might have guess by 90% of all the Mario plots ever, Bowser has kidnapped Princess Peach with Applejack witnessing it from the ground. Bowser flies overhead in his clown car, but Applejack is able to knock him out of the sky.
Bowser is pretty pissed at Applejack for ruining his original, new, never been tried before, completely unpredictable plan and vows revenge on her.
The Mario brothers and Princess Peach thank Applejack for her help and agree to help her figure out how to get home in return.
After explaining her situation, the Mario brothers and Peach go with Applejack to find her element and get home, the toads in shock that Peach is actually doing something.
"Oh of course! I can't just sit around waiting to be kidnapped for the millionth time! I need to take action for once!"
Said everyone who played a Mario game, ever!
Back over to the world of Animal Crossing, the three aforementioned ponies, who everyone has already guessed by now to be the Cutie Mark Crusaders, are trapped in a world that is not there own… So, what do they decide to do?
Because why would they freak out about not being able to go home?! For that matter, how are they even there?! They weren’t near the magical spell when it happened! Unless they were trying to earn their cutie marks in destroying the space-time continuum. … Wouldn’t be the stupidest thing I’ve heard for their cutie marks.
Before the Crusaders can get into more trouble, however, they are quickly spotted by Pinkie Pie and the others. The Crusaders explain that a large tear in the space-time continuum appeared above them and rather than finding Twilight or Celestia and warning them, they decided to check it out.
The Crusaders agree to help them by being. Don’t you scream what title you want! I’ve had it up to here with that joke! Never again will I let you three just scream at the top of your lungs what kind of-
"CUTIE MARK CRUSADER TREASURE TRACKERS, YAY!"
FUCK!
Pinkie Pie explains what a cutie mark is to Bob and why the Crusaders don’t have theirs yet.
Pinkie Pie went up to Isabelle's ears, and whispered into them. As to not alert anyone around them. Including any of the CMC.
"Between you and me, they all have talents, they just haven't figured out that for themselves."
"Then why don't you just tell them?"
"Because the writers of the episodes don't allow that."
Pfft… Okay, I admit… that was kind of funny.
And then the joke kills itself by stretching it long beyond the point of being funny…
"That was a close one Pinkie. Don't wanna go spouting out things like that. Who knows who could be reading this right?"
"Hahaha! You said it author! I guess I should keep myself from bringing up stuff like that. Hasbro are definitely not going to appreciate things like that! Oh well. Do you want a cupcake?"
"Oh sure! I've been craving cupcakes for a while now. WOW! This is really good! Thanks Pinkie!"
"You are welcome! After all, you are writing this super amazing spectacular awesomerific story with your friend right? It's the least I can do."
"Uh speaking of which. I think we should get back to the story Pinkie. I think Isabelle is about to lose her brain right about now..."
"OH! I suppose you're right!"
Super, amazing, spectacular, awesomerific are not the words I would use to describe this.
Anyway, the group finds a small crack in the ground and after digging it up, discovers that it is one of the Chaos Emeralds. They also see that the Mushroom Kingdom is only a few short clicks away from where the village is and they decide to investigate.
We cut to the planet Hocotate where we meet Captain Olimar. We get some backstory on the guy, but it’s pretty unimportant to the find pony plot. Olimar and a copilot named Louie (I’m not familiar with the Pikmin games, so I have no idea who Louie is) travel to the Pikmin planet.
Olimar finds a lifeform on the planet he’s not familiar with and decides to take it back for dissection. Eww…
Rarity awakens as the Pikmin start to carry her off, her screams terrifying the little buggers. Olimar is able to calm both parties down and Rarity explains who she is and what happened. However, before Olimar can help her, he gets a transmission from Louie, saying that he’s under attack. Olimar and Rarity rush to help him.
Meanwhile, back with Pit and the others, they arrive at Yoshi’s Island. They decide to split up and cover more ground when suddenly…
Palutena smiled.
"HOORAY SMILES!"
"Pinkie Pie!? What are you doing here?!? You're not supposed to be in this chapter!"
"Woops!"
"...Well anyways..."
… Pinkie… Breath that fourth wall… one more time… see what happens…
They end up finding an egg and bring it back to the spot where they separated. So, why did they decide to split up? Nothing happened! It just wasted a scene! Why couldn’t they have just found the egg where they were?! Because that’s all that happens! They find an egg! And then they regroup!
Anyway, a Yoshi is born from it and agrees to help them on their quest. Yoshi best known for being doormats. Speaking of doormats, Fluttershy is attacked by a group of goombas and shy guys when Yoshi and the gang beat them back.
Fluttershy explains to the group what Rainbow Dash already told them and they agree to help Fluttershy as well. The group follows Shadow as he sense a Chaos Emerald and they find it in the possession of Diamond Dogs.
Oh, god! Our heroes are in trouble! Not even the mighty Starfleet Magic could defeat the Diamond Dogs! They are truly mightier villains than even Tirek!
Tirek: I’m going to fucking kill that son of a bitch!
Shy gasped. They sound like those diamond dogs! Why here now of all times??
"They sound like the Diamond Dogs. But I thought they left Ponyville ages ago."
Those … sounds… could they be… Diamond Dogs?!
Back in Dreamland, King Dedede grows suspicious of what Twilight and the others were looking for, stating that if Kirby is involved, it must be important.
NEXT SCENE!
Twilight and the others go into Whispy Woods to try and find the gemstone. Twilight asks some more questions as to why Kirby is a star warrior. Apparently, he woke up from some hyperbolic sleep chamber way too early and thus is still a baby. A baby with the powers of a god. That’s a scary combination.
Meanwhile, back at King Dedede’s castle, because I guess the story likes to play ping pong with us, King Dedede manages to convince a character named Whispy that Kirby is a threat to the forest. Whispy is dubious since Dedede has threatened the forest for personal gain in the past, but Dedede states that he’s changed and that Kirby is the villain.
But then an evil spirit takes over Whispy and that evil spirit is Nightmare Moon.
Damn it… I wanted to be a tree first…
Yeah, so I guess, Nightmare Moon took over the entire forest… Okay…
Twilight and the others find a Chaos Emerald, but then are attacked by Nightmare Moon. And what in menacing way is the horrible Nightmare Moon, with all her magical powers going to attack our heroes?!
Yes, by throwing apples at them! That will teach Twilight to be afraid of Apple Buck Season, thus destroying Equestria’s economy.
Twilight manages to unlock the power of the Chaos Emerald as Nightmare Moon is about to destroy them… You know… with apples… And manages to destroy Nightmare Moon with her magic.
They gather up the Chaos Emerald and Meta Knight explains that they need to keep hold of it, since it is the only way for Twilight to get home.
Meanwhile in the Mushroom Kingdom, Princess Peach makes this big speech about how she needs to be stronger, how she’s tired of being kidnapped, tired of being a victim. How she needs to stand up and fight for those who can’t fight for themselves! How she needs to take some responsibility for herself and for her subjects! She’s the ruler of the Mushroom Kingdom god damnit! And by god, she’s going to live up to that title! She’s going to change her ways! Not be a damsel in distress and show the world that she can be just as strong as any Bayonetta or Samus Aran!
… And then she gets immediately kidnapped by Bowser Jr.
Well, that’s one way to completely undermine the whole fucking point of the fucking chapter.
Mario, Luigi and Applejack have to save her. Way to send female characters a step back, lady!
Meanwhile with Pinkie and crew…
Meanwhile with Pinkie and crew…
Stop copying me, story!
The group sees Princess Peach being kidnapped and rush off to rescue her. The Mario brothers attack Bowser Jr. and defeat him using…
Mario and Luigi used the splash bros attack on Bowser Jr. (If you have played Superstar Saga, you'll know what that is)
And if you’re like me and didn’t… Then FUCK YOU!
Bob, Pinkie and the others arrive to battle Bowser Jr. with Bob signing the backstory of the characters with only Pinkie able to correctly guess.
Okay, story, I’ll give you that. I do like that.
Bowser Jr. manages to transform his clown car into a super mech, which he says he got from a balding fat guy. Hmm… Do I know any of them?
I didn’t think so…
The robot manages to defeat Mario and Luigi, but Bob steps in and uses his various moves from Smash Bros to defeat him. Such as his grab, his butterfly net (that is apparently indestructible as it is able to catch fucking bullet bills) and a tree that he just grows out of nowhere.
I could forgive the poor logic if the fight scene was at least entertaining to read, but it can’t even muster enough to do that.
Bowser Jr launches a bullet bill, causing Isabelle to freak out over Villager's safety.
"Oh no! I can't look!"
She started covering her eyes when suddenly the bullet bill was pocketed by Villager!
"What the?! How'd you do that?"
That kid just grabbed that thing like it was nothin'!"
Pinkie Pie suddenly hopped out into the action.
"You said it!"
"Pinkie Pie?"
"I don't know how you did that, but I don't think you can grab this!"
A banzai bill then launched out of the mech. Villager had other plans though. He planted a tree that blocked the banzai bill, and chopped it down to damage the banzai bill.
Bowser Jr jumped back in shock.
"How did a tree manage to stop my Banzai Bill?! What are you?!"
Villager took out the bullet bill from earlier, and before he threw it, he gave Bowser Jr a death glare.
"NO! GO BACK! STOP!"
Jr started sweating and began to swing his arms in the air. Inevitably, the bullet bill hit the mech.
*BOOM!*
"Now I'm really mad! I didn't wanna do this, but now I have no choice! Fire everything!"
Villager got out his butterfly net and proceeded to grab all the fire power.
"Uh oh..."
"We have to help him some how."
"Ooh! I know! We can use my party cannon! I keep party cannons all over Equestria just in case."
"Pinkie, this is no time for a party!"
Suddenly, Isabelle had the idea to dump all the fire power in Pinkie's party cannon!
"Wait a minute! Mayor! Put all of Bowser Jr's firepower in here!"
Villager did just that, and it looked like the cannon was about to burst.
"It looks like this thing is gonna blow any second!"
"Then we should fire it now!"
"B-but I've never done this sort of thing before. What if I miss?"
"JUST DO IT!"
"Everyone, duck and cover!"
Isabelle fired the cannon, launching out everything back at Bowser Jr.
"Nonononononono!"
The mech exploded, with Jr trying to make a last ditch effort to escape by using the badly damaged clown car.
"Uh oh! I gotta get out, now!"
As you can tell, the descriptions for this thing are unforgivably bad. I can’t get a sense of what is going on as well as the flow being poor. The talking head syndrome is some of the worst I’ve seen since I’m not even sure which head is talking half the time.
We then cut to Princess Celestia who has been kidnapped by an evil being. Ah, so I guess if you have ‘princess’ in your title, you automatically get kidnapped. Twilight is so fucking screwed then.
Back on the planet of the Pikmin, Rarity and Olimar wake up after a night, since I guess at night, monsters on the planet are a lot more dangerous. So, I guess Louie is fucking screwed. Still, they decide to go searching for him and follow Olimar’s device.
Meanwhile, back with Twilight and Kirby, they arrive at ship Meta Knight told them about and decide to investigate. King Dedede follows closely behind to see what kind of treasures and such he can use to defeat Kirby.
NEXT SCENE!
We head back to Rarity and Olimar, which raises the question of why the fuck didn’t we just stick with them if we were going to go back to them only a few seconds later? Anyway, they find a monster and…
"Stretchy arms rule!"
Hey! You 2 aren't supposed to be here!
"Aw. Where did the Professor tell us to go Sonic? Holoska wasn't it?"
WHOA WHOA WAIT! How are you in Unleashed's story line if Sonic is in this Story too?!?
"That hasn't happened yet. I am the Sonic that went back to the past at the end of the adventure where I met my future-self. In other words, this is the past, and I have yet to experience your story line."
Oh I see. I suppose that makes sense. Well, you 2 have fun now.
"Haha! We will! Travelling the world is fun! Want some chocolate?"
Sure why not?
Wait! What?! Who?! Where?! What?! Why?! How?! Huh?! The fuck is going on?! Did the writer just suffer a fucking stroke?! Have I finally lost it?! That’s it! I’ve finally lost it! I’m completely insane! I’ve fucking snapped! It’s finally happened! After all these years, these fan fics have finally broken me! If you’ll excuse me, I need to go take a shit and then stick my head into a toilet!
Back with the actual story.
Wait… So… that was more of that fourth wall breaking?
… THE FUCK ARE YOU DOING THAT FOR?!
I thought it was literally part of the fucking story! There is nothing to indicate that there is a change! There is nothing that tells me we are breaking the fourth wall! Not a fucking thing! This is confusing and kills the flow of the fucking story! Not that it had flow to begin with, but this is just … giving up!
So, if the author of this story doesn’t care, why should I?
Olimar and Rarity attack the creature and defeat it rather easily.
Meanwhile, Kirby, Twilight and the others find themselves in the world of the Pikmin and manage to find Olimar and Rarity.
However, they are also found by Pandora, the Goddess of Calamity. (I guess she’s part of the Kid Icarus games.) Pandora summons the monster that Olimar and Rarity defeated, albeit stronger this time.
There was no time to waste! Rarity needed to be saved now!!
"We have to save Rarity!"
We’ve got to save Rarity!
If we don’t do something fast, Rarity won’t be saved!
Don’t worry, Rarity! We’ll save you!
Have no fear, Rarity! Rainbow Dash is here to save you!
WOULD YOU JUST STOP FUCKING TALKING ABOUT SAVING ME AND JUST FUCKING SAVE ME?!
They battle the creature with Olimar using his Pikmin to attack the glowing weak point on the monster’s forehead. I guess the goddess of calamity had to make it a fair fight. They manage to defeat it and rescue Rarity. Would you mind telling us that we rescued Rarity, I think there are infants born to this world who haven’t yet figured that out?!
Back with Celestia, she casts a spell to send out a message for help from other heroes, since you know… she’s pretty much worthless here.
A young boy, Ness, manages to catch Celestia’s spell and sets out to find her and help her.
Back with Pit and the others, Rainbow Dash decides to tell the others about Tirek and all the nasty stuff he did. If this were a ‘good’ story, I would say that Tirek would appear at some point in the story. Otherwise, that would have been pointless to bring up.
They manage to track down a cave and find Diamond Dogs and a Chaos Emerald. They enter the cave and fall for a trap by the Diamond Dogs… A steel cage… Yes, a goddess of light, two angels, a hedgehog who can manipulate time and space, a hedgehog who can move faster than sound, and a goddess of chaos are outwitted by a steel cage.
Truly, the Diamond Dogs are our greatest foe!
The group manage to escape the cage, thanks to Pit’s legendary bow and they battle the Diamond Dogs. However, before they can obtain the emerald, the Diamond Dogs manage to unlock its power and become super Diamond Dogs.
Foolish writer! Why would you make the Diamond Dogs weaker by giving them the power of the Chaos Emeralds?! The Diamond Dogs are already perfect! To give them more power is to take their power away!
Olimar, Twilight, Rarity, Kirby and the others manage to revive Olimar’s crew and they try to figure out what to do next. Turns out that Alph and the other members of Olimar's crew found a Chaos Emerald and give it to Twilight for safe keeping. With that, Olimar’s ship manages to track down the energies of the other Chaos Emeralds and Twilight and the others set out to find them.
He eats way more than I do. I don't think there's anyone else who can eat twice as much as he does."
"Poyo?"
"Hold on! Stop this chapter right now!"
Everyone just stood there dumbfounded.
"Pinkie, we're not supposed to find you yet. What are you doing?"
"Don't you realize that Brittany practically spoiled an important plot point? One of the writers hasn't beaten Pikmin 3 yet!"
Out of nowhere, a cane drags Pinkie away.
And then I fucking murdered her! Don’t believe me?! There’s her corpse!
God, damnit! Why won’t you die?!
Back over to Rainbow Dash and her crew, the three Diamond Dogs have somehow fused together to create a Cerberus. They battle Cerberus… Well, I say battle, but frankly, this would have made for a more entertaining fight scene.
At least it would have been so bad, it’s good.
Cerberus manages to get away, and our heroes are forced to chase after it to prevent the Yoshis from getting attacked. However, before the Cerberus can get that far, it runs into Twilight and her companions. The Cerberus proves too much for the group, and it isn’t until Ness arrives that our heroes manage to overcome it.
Ness asks for Twilight by name.
Meanwhile, a character from the Mario series named Starlow, because I guess the character roster count was still too low for a high school reunion, appears and warns Mario’s group that there has been some activity in the underground pipe maze.
The group enters to Pipe Mazes, leaving the Crusaders and Isabella behind. They traverse the dark cave before setting upon a door by Dr. W. And before Pinkie Pie can spoil the obvious, they are attacked by Guts-Man, one of the recurring enemies of the Mega Man series.
Suddenly a figure in blue (OH, GOD! Don’t keep me in suspense!) attacks Guts-man defeating him with a bomb. But it turns out that it’s actually just a copy of Guts-man… Which begs the question, why didn’t he just send the real one? I haven’t played every single Mega Man game, so, I’m not sure if Guts-man left Dr. Wily and Wily needed to build a clone.
But whatever, the group leaves the Pipe Maze… not really resolving anything… and make their way back to the Crusaders and Isabella where Mega Man explains who he is.
"I'm Rock. I was just a cleaning robot created by Dr. Light. But I was converted into a fighting robot to save the world known as Mega Man!"
Uh, wrong! He’s a SUPER fighting robot, according to the theme song of the T.V series! I am so giving this story a thumbs down, solely on that!
The group makes their way to Dr. Light’s lab, where he explain his past partnership with Dr. Wily and now how they’re mortal enemies. It’s kind of pointless over all, other than that kind of establishment, the other characters don’t really contribute much except for saying “They’re in a different world.”
Meanwhile, at the lair of Dr. Wily, we see that Guts-man is just as confused as I am that Dr. Wily is creating clones of him. You’d think the clones be a little bit stronger as well, but I guess after years of doing this, Dr. Wily is short on robotic parts.
NEXT SCENE!
We come back to Dr. Light’s Lab our group gets a message from a character with a pig logo? … Yeah, I have no idea on this one. But I’m sure it’s not a Fire Emblem character. … Oh, shoot. I wasn’t supposed to say that.
Just forget I said anything.
Anyway, he threatens to take over the world-
And says he’ll destroy anyone in his way.
Before the group can take off to face him, Protoman arrives to aid the group. Protoman is kind of the Dr. Wily version of Mega Man. Protoman explains that the robots he’s using is powered by an energy called PSI. I only know what that is through friends who have played the Earthbound series, and I’ve figured out that the most likely character that messaged them is Porky. Though I’m just guess based on the little information I have on the series.
Back over to Twilight, she asks Ness how he knows who she is and Ness explains that he heard a voice called out her name for help and decided to scout her out to see what the connection was. Ness tells Twilight that the rest of her friends are likely in the huge mech city off in the distance. Ness uses his powers to teleport the characters to the city, because Twilight needed to be buttfucked in this to make room for other characters.
They arrive at the Mega City, the name of the highly advanced town (Lazy writing.), where the city is almost immediately attacked by ghosts. That or the Adam Sandler movie Pixels. I can’t tell at this point.
"Maybe a little homing attack’ll send these ghosts packing!"
Sonic attempts to use his homing attack on several ghosts, but he ends up going through them and getting covered in slime instead.
"Ugh!"
Suddenly, right on cue, Pac-Man appears and manages to defeat the ghosts before they can do any harm to the city. Apparently with two other characters that I’m not familiar with. After banishing the ghosts, Pac-Man takes the group back to the lab of Sir Cumference (Man, nintendo really likes their puns)
It turns out that Ness’s teleportation spell accidentally sent them to Pac-Man’s world rather than Mega Man’s. Way to go, kid. Turns out the villain of the Pac-Man games, Lord Betrayus (Funny, I always thought it was those four ghosts who always chase him) is behind the ghost attacks on the populace. Fortunately, they are just inside agents for the good guys who keep tabs on the villains.
Speaking of the villain, he’s outraged that Pac-Man has gathered some more allies in his never ending quest to defeat him, but is contacted by a mysterious figure, presumably the one who is manipulating everything.
The mysterious figure explains that he’s already working with a number of villains from the Nintendo world, such as Porky, and he is willing to help Betrayus. With a name like that, how can you not trust him?
The spies overhear this meeting and rush off to warn Pac-Man before something bad happens. And then something bad happens… Way to go, you worthless ghosts!
The world of Mega Man and the world of Pac-Man are starting to merge together, causing massive natural disasters to both worlds.
Meanwhile, with Applejack and the others, they try to take shelter as the world go straight to hell. However, thanks to plot convenience news, (I wish I was kidding), they find out that Twilight and the others are on the other world.
”An earthquake of unknown origin has just caused an uproar in Mega City and objects seem to be appearing out of thin air. In the midst of the chaos, there appears to be a group of small multi-coloured horses, a young child in a striped shirt wearing a red cap and a backpack, and some other creatures which we’ve yet to identify. More on this story as it develops."
They showed a group of these "creatures" that seemed to be running towards something, as if they were trying to find something.
Applejack nearly jumped up in excitement after seeing what looked like her and Pinkie's friends.
"Wait a minute. Did y’all see that? That looked like Twilight and the others!"
And while Applejack’s group form a search party, Twilight and the others get the same news report and see Applejack is on the other planet. Thanks, plot convenience news! How else would we know about things that help us further the plot?!
At the same time, Ness senses a psychic disturbance in a nearby maze and Pac-Man agrees to join him while the others search for the other ponies.
As they go through the labyrinth, they are ambushed by the greatest villain in any labyrinth ever.
David Bowie!
No, they actually run into some ghosts.
Pac-Man, Twilight and Ness fight them off as best they can, but they soon find out that they are out matched. Ness manages to distract the ghosts with a flash of light and the group slips away. They find themselves trapped, but thankfully Lucas is there to save them at the last second. That seems to be a recurring theme here.
Lucas explains that he was following the same voice that Ness was and was searching for Twilight. And our story ends with the group reuniting at Mega City.
Yeah… Remember what I said about not finding any Fire Emblem fics that were finished… Yeah, the same thing with Smash Bros. Why don’t you people write more?
Though I should consider this a mercy because, this fic is stupid!
The talking head syndrome is a huge issue, with scenes, emotions, settings, expressions, and body language not being portrayed appropriately to the point where they might as well all be Pac-Man.
The characters are far too many in this, which is a standard problem in a Smash Bros fic, since it has to try and focus on all of them, and it ends up focusing on none of them. Add in the ponies and you pretty much forget about them. Hell, I went through the last 10 chapters, and there was barely a mention of Spike.
The characterization and interactions between the characters are very brief, barely giving the characters time to sit down and just talk. The story’s pacing is breakneck speed, with no time to just catch your breath. You feel like you're constantly moving from one character to the next, without much context to them or the world they live in.
Not to mention some of the dialogue being atrocious. The narration often repeats what other characters have said or are going to say, thus making this fic feel longer than it already is.
I imagine the writing team on this will continue this fic and perhaps I will come back to it, but probably not by choice. But because … I feel I should give a final chance to impress me… Which I’m extremely dubious about…
Next week, it’s back to Pony fics and I’ll start reviewing a movie that I’ve dreaded watching ever since ‘Equestria Girls.’
Oh God I have a bad feeling I know what it is.
I enjoyed Fire Emblem month. It was an interesting peek into an interesting world.
I certainly hope not.
And I'm done.
Not because this is particularly bad, mind you, but because the rule of writing is that numbers from zero to ten are written out, not used like this: 10. This doesn't give me much hope for what is to come, or maybe I'm just being a grammar Nazi.
Also, why does everyone hate Hades? Even I didn't beat up on Hades...
I'd ask to see that, but eh, when have I ever been listened to?
"I am Darkseid; I am your New God... wait, wrong universe."
This made me laugh. Really, it did
Take that as a sign. Perhaps the Empress is trying to tell you something.
She works in mysterious ways...
Oh dear, it's spreading.
Well, that was pointless. Let's all go home and forget this ever happened.
Aren't, dear critique, aren't.
I just set the library on fire. Whoops
Well, you brought it up, so...
Well... "Poyo" is one of the only things Kirby can say... maybe it's like "smurf" and can mean a multitude of things...
Most likely.
You know, reading it as you describe it... this could actually be really funny. Like the scene with the monkeys in Jungle Book.
Toss up between Manticore Slayers and Life Ruiners. Unless you've heard worse.
And now it feels like the author is just throwing whatever they think will stick... this is not good.
Good fight scene time
Give me fourteen thousand ponies and some weapons, I'll have those dogs running with their tails between their legs... wait, I already did that.
... Which one is that?
Great review, as always. Look forward to next week
This is smash brothers, and we are about to do something like this. Well, ths is gonna stink isn't it?
Still, bet the tie line would be better handled her than in...
Man of Steel!
Here, read "heart of worlds"
Well, techinically they are in the tree to help rechage it for now. Nothing is said that they couldn't be taken out laterjust for cruds and giggles.
Hey while you're killing everypony, mind kissing Amy Rose first? That hedgehog has been a thorn in my side since Adventure 2 and I think its about time she suffers for her sin of existing.
Wait, maybe its talking about Rainbow Power. You know, since they proved that the elements were just items meant to harness power that was already there and they are now the elements of harmony in spirit lik they have always been.
Why is Kirby on Mobius when he should be on Popstar? Why are Pit and Petluna able to trave worlds?
Hey, I don't forget him...I usually have him kidnapped.
*Bangs head*
Why is DeeDee's castle on Mobius!!!!! Heck, , sinc when is the world of the Sonic games called mobius? If you are talking Mobius then it better turn out to be SATAM that you are flipping corssing over with. Then again, pony crossover with SATAMw would be cool. Not the games, just SATAM.
So, traveling from world to world is that easy? Celestia the comology is fffed up.
Popstar! The world is popstar!!!! IT's not that hard. Celestia, the guy who messes thatup should be sho-
*Ducks under a bullet*
Ummm...given ice cream?
Oh fer crying....the game and the anime are not the same thing author!!!! Deedee is just a mishuded king in the games that messes up from time to time, he is about harmless as Mothra. In the anime is is also abumbler but a little more of a despot. Second, since this is a universe where going from dimensin is as simple as walking down to the coner store, then why is NME ordering these losers. Why not give DeeDEE some fraking pirates or metrois.
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Oh, wait...
Knowing Bowser, he probably did think that was an original plan.
Yes Peach beacu (Super mario 2) you (Super Mario RPG) never (super paper mario) taken Super Princess Peach) taken action (the cartoon) before.
No, none of that!!!!
Trixie: *Growls* go on, try to ay something
I wasn't thinking a think. But yours is nice.
Darn it Whipsy!!! Can't you go one Kirby game without becoming a monster?
You know, Nghtmare Moon would be a far better end oss villian in a kirby game
No, he is Rock's older brother who was made by light bfore he made the others. But, Blues (Protoman) disappeared when Light and Wily made the other bots.
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I'm calling no on self-promotions!
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You forgot Super Mario 3D World.
I don't feel like editing mah comment.
Also, for some of those ideas
NEEEERRRRRDDDD!!!!!
You know, where is Samus in all of this!? Or Link for that matter?
Actually Samus seems to get screwed over in a lot of Smash Bros and other Nintendo fanworks...
3776342 No more than Nintendo did when they made Other M.
I missed last week's review. Been busy, will continue to be more busy as time rolls on. This is a good thing, sort of.
Don't get me wrong, Fire Emblem looks great, and I do like knowing what others are passionate about. But stories on ponies I came here for, and ponies I must have!
I do believe my latest story has a bit of that going on in it.
Not even fully out of the factory yet, and already broken.
Hell, If I had a mansion handed to me for free, I would not shed one tear over where I live now, and I have been living her for over 20 years.
Can't say I keep each scene in different chapters, But most do tend to last at least a few paragraphs. I would have 28 chapters to a 5 chapter story if I did it chapter by chapter. And none of them very long.
Still, yes, many skips in a story would be vary distracting. Like the notorious flashbacks embedded in some chapters, along with in the rest of the stories some make.
No, nothing that Tiff had to tell Twilight about him, made Twilight the least bit suspicious of him before then.
I guess Twilight is going to be just as clueless as she is in other stories.
I am getting flashbacks of the story I just written.
Seeing that you are talking about Pinkie Pie, little would surprise me with her. She did once literally fall apart, and picked up her own pieces, and put herself back together, all wile listening to a conversation. Who else dose these things on the show?!
I am sure Peach is as well. She likes to be taken by Bowser, just to have Mario save her, time and time again. It was proven. Peach is powerful, and could easily take Bowser down on her own. Hell she kicked Zelda's ass in a fight. She could take Bowser down if she wished.
Oh' I repeated that last part.
She is faking and really upset over Applejack upsetting the status quo for her. She is just trying to be nice about it.
The forth wall is now in her very breath?
I don't see how that works, but again, I guess that's just Pinkie for you.
You know, one day she is going to give you the stare down of your life, and make you think that licking the forth wall is not only possible, but is damn delicious as you try it.
Than again, she might do the same thing to me, if I keep writing the type of stories about her that I do.
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I think Boo wins.
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Or maybe janemba does.
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You know, even in the (I think gen 1 ponies cartoon movies) they got attacked by some real mean trees. Though these trees were throwing sharp javelin like sticks that could have killed the ponies. One stayed behind as a distraction to let the other escape alive. She did this by getting the trees attention with taunting them, and teleporting to a different spot before a sharp stick could impale her. Or was it a him? In those cartoons who the hell could tell?
They did have foals in that cartoon, but who could have been the fathers?
Why did Meta Knight need to explain this to them? Was Twilight being clueless again? And I thought the ponies needed the elements of harmony to get home. Not the Chaos Emerald. Is Meta Knight just being clueless too, and just thinking he knows the situation?
I thought it is Sonic and his gang that needs the Chaos Emerald to get back to their home. Not the ponies.
I am not even writing this story and I feel I may know better on what may need to be done than those in the story, or the one writing it. But that is just my guess.
It was funny to me. OK, I like crude hummer.
I think she already was, being so clueless and needing simple things explained to her in this story.
I need to find a better, or at least alternate word to use than "clueless," It makes me look like I am just repeating myself.
You know, in 1,000 ways to die I saw a person kill himself doing shit huffing. Don't tell me you are going to commit suicide over this. You have yet to review my squeal. Yes, I am worried about that.
No, not the review of my story so much, just the idea of it, it is more that you have a lot of others out there that look to you for your personal input! And think about Computer! and Think about little filly's sad faces! Yes! think of their sad, sad faces!
Oh, forget it, I am just repeating myself again.
Where is Rarity when they need them? Oh' yes. She is with the pikmin. She got a little carried away with them earlier.
My question is, didn't the writer know it takes seven of them to make one super? Not one Chaos Emerald to make several super?
Well, Tails might have been able to figure something like that out, if it was possible, for he has an IQ of about 300. But Diamond Dogs?
Because she is Pinkie Pie, and she defies logic. Haven't, you been paying attention? I mean she can dig through the ground with her head mane. Who else does that?!
I didn't know there was a world named Mega Man.
I heard your name being called. And by the name alone, I just knew it hat to be you.
There is an old song I liked called 'It had to be you.'
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It is always tempting to do, But even I do try to avoid it. For that very reason. Not that I actually follow all of the rules of writing as any writer should.
Not at all, and many of us can use more of them. I know I could.
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I listen, sort of. I tend to forget most of it though, I guess that is just as bad then. Never Mind. I thought I was going somewhere with this.
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Oh' I'm repeating again.
I know. Even I am doing it!
And I missed that. This is why I may never be a good grammar checker.
Like "I am Groot." I mean, it really says it all, don't it.
Or maybe "Cutie Mark Crusaders, Blows It, Yay!"
OK, Maybe I shouldn't have gone there. Mixed interpretations and all that.
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Very good point. I would have to look over the whole review again, but I think I did see something about them looking for the harmony stones, or I just hallucinated it. With me, that is vary possible.
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Finally! One who knows Peach is powerful. Seeing that she is a game character, she is possibly into playing games with a situation.
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As a Metroid game, that one kind of bugs me. And I am a Metroid fan.