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NoGoodUsrNames99


Trying to improve my writing. Please critisize my stories, old or new!

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  • 393 weeks
    Uh, new story I guess.

    So, I, uh, haven't touched this site since may. Haven't really had any ideas, and have been really lazy. But I have an idea now, and I'll be writing a new story (for once)
    Be looking for it within the next few days. Or weeks, I have no idea.

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  • 419 weeks
    New story.

    My new story is up for moderation right now! Here, since it's been a while, I'll tell you what it's about. There's a small Filly by the name of Pink Sunshine, one day her mother dies and her Dad looses his mind, and starts drinking and abusing. So, being a crystal pony and living in the Crystal Empire, she sets out into the frozen north, hoping to find a new family that will love her.

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  • 420 weeks
    Update.

    Alright, so I just want to give a small update. So I realize it's been a while since I updated my new Mario story. That's because I'm juggling three different projects. One of them, I'm having trouble starting it up, I've come up with several different scenarios, but it's just not clicking, but once it comes out, I'm very confident that it's gonna be good.

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  • 422 weeks
    New Mario and Luigi!

    Well, the original on was a complete mess, and I've tried and tried to fix it, but I just can't, so I've decided to completely remake it from the ground up, and here it is. I'm sorry is this is an inconvenience, and I hope all my fans can enjoy the remake as much as the original.

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  • 423 weeks
    Another delay.

    I'm here to say that the next chapter of Mario and Luigi will take a while to come out, but not as long as it did last time. I'm currently juggling three stories right now, not to mention getting into game developing in real life (witch I'm doing pretty good) So, yeah, it'll be a couple more weeks. Just getting this out of the way.

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Dec
14th
2015

New Battles. · 8:03pm Dec 14th, 2015

will be practicing a new way of writing the battles, because I'm not happy with the way they are right now. I will be writing them as if they are in a Mario and luigi game, with Bros. attacks and healing and stuff. Be reasonably honest on weather you like the new format. Also, I will not be changing the old ones.

Tell me what you think and I'll decide weather to continue this. Here's a preview:

These guys forced me!" Dimentio replied.

"What? no! Wiggler, don't believe him!" Mario exclaimed.

"What...is this true?" Wiggler asked, turning yellow again.

"Yes, I was doing it on their behalf, because they hate you, they are enemies of the forest!"

"I thought plumbers where friends..." Wiggler sighed. "Wiggly wiggler...is full of..." He then turned red, "RAAAAGE!" Wiggler screamed, before charging at the bros.

"Have fun!" Dimentio exclaimed, before warping away.

"WIGGLER CRUSH!" He screamed, before smashing the ground, causing a shock wave that the bros. had to jump over. Mario was standing it the top of the battlefeild, Luigi was at the bottom, and Twilight was flying in-between them in the middle. Mario then chose the jump command, and preformed a successful jump on Wiggler's head.

Luigi then got his turn, and chose the bros. attacks command. He then chose fireflower, turning them into Fire-Mario and fire-Luigi. They then rapidly threw fire balls at Wiggler. They continued until their transformation.

Then came Twilight's turn, she had the blocks: Jump, horn, magic attack, Trio attack, and item. She chose Magic attack, and had to shoot Magic at Wiggler along with a rhythm. Afterwards, Wiggler got some damage. Wiggler then walked up to Mario and shot a small brown ball, and Mario jumped over it. He repeated the process with Luigi, then walked back and shot a ball at all three, Mario jumped over it, and Luigi got hurt. Twilight had to duck under it.

Mario then chose bros. attacks, and picked green shell. Mario and Luigi then ran to the bottom of the battlefeild and kicked the shell back and forth, slowly moving up to Wiggler, and continued until Mario hit it one final time. Luigi then picked Mushroom to heal himself. Twilight chose Trio attack.

They ran to the left all the way to the end of the battlefild, and Twilight pulled out a ball. Mario and Luigi got on the ball and Twilight wedged her head under it, and bounced it up into the air. They hurtled through the air and Twilight continued to get under them and repeat this process until the ball his Wiggler's head.

Comments ( 1 )

I say you should continue this! Seems like it could be fun and fluff out the battles a bit.

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