This poem makes no sense and is shit, right?

Cut a tie, watch it die.

Break a truce, let hell loose.

Enemies made, but they'll all fade.

In ashes of, countless loss.

Comments

[Passions Star]

Dear, poems do not have to make sense, your meter is fine, I can see nothing wrong with your poem.

[Wacuire]

3551260 Perhaps you're right. Though I can't shake off the feeling this one is a mess that doesn't make sense. Like the connection of the short sentences can't be seen easily enough

[Passions Star]

In the dark, lack of light.
Shadows bark, not to bright.
just too dim, cannot see.
on a whim, nothing be.

As an example, does not really make sense, yet does say something, Poetry is more "thinking the words".

[Wacuire]

3551291 I guess you do have a point. And that was well written ^_^

[Wacuire]

3551291 Another poem was written. If you take the first letter of every setsnce you get the word: Lies.

Lurking deep within the dark, stalking us just like a shark.

Invisible to our line of sight, just waiting to cause us pain and fright.

Every step that we will take, they follow us for vengeance sake.

Silently waiting for the perfect moment, to bring us down before our opponents.

Still felt off topic when it was finished :/

[Passions Star]

3551300 Thank you, now you understand why I thought your poem was good.