Oct
11th
2015
Zero Blogs: Dusk Shine part 2 · 9:08pm Oct 11th, 2015
This is harder than I thought. Mainly because I'm not sure what the old Dusk didn't have that the new Dusk needs. Yes, it was rushed, and some parts could have been elaborated upon, but I can't get a good idea of what's actually lacking. The first chapter needs to establish Sunset's regret, the student's hatred of her, and her relationship with Celestia. All of these aspects were present in the original, but I'm having a hard time figuring how to elaborate on them.
I'm all for elaborating different parts, but if you can't find any way too do so, then you might just need to rewrite the chapter sperate from the published version.
That way a chapter isn't missing from the published story and you aren't feeling compelled to get this done quickly.
That's my opinion.
3462647 I can't do that, Plushy. That would be the easy way out. A sign that I'm not confident enough in my own ability to improve. You'll recall that when I did my earlier revisions, I unpublished them as well until I was finished. Dusk is no different. If moving my writing up to the next level means working under pressure, then I at least have to try.
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Well, I admire your ambition and perseverance. Lemme know if I can help in anyway.