Liquid Courage Commentary: Chapter 1

This entry contains spoilers for Liquid Courage, and contains sexually suggestive material. Be warned...

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This is twice Grey Hat has inspired a clop now, with the first being SINless Desire. I suppose before I can properly comment on this story however, I first need to talk a little bit about Grey Hat.

Grey Hat was intended to be an adult-orientated story, despite the teen tag. Not in the sense that it needs to be rated mature for explicit sex or gore, but it dealt with mature themes like trauma, sexual themes, loss, and recovery. The story of Grey Hat primarily takes place in the city of Magnasanti. Humans have been at war with an alien race, and Magnasanti was one of the closet resupply depots to contested space. However due to the constant attention the war was given, the people, at least in the scope of my city, was left to their own devices. It brewed a lot of angry, lonely feelings as the gap between the 99% and 1% grew larger and larger. It produced feelings of abandonment. And lonely, angry people need distractions.

Glitz and glamour. I actually bought Bladerunner to help me write about Magnasanti. Yeah, I invested research money on fanfiction. Still, that false sense of personality that masks the darker underbelly and nastiness was something that I hoped to convey. People need distractions. Speaking strictly about sexual themes, I wanted this society, this city on a planet far, far away, to be inundated with neglect. They’d produce consumables and activities about any sin under the sun.

Sex of course was one of themes.

Speaking strictly in terms of grey Hat, I never wanted to openly display anything sexual, but i did want the implication to be there. I originally wanted something very similar to what happened in this chapter to occur at the end of the fourth chapter of Grey Hat, leaving the open sexual implications there as Sophia makes an open proposal for a brief romp near a love hotel.

I could never show something openly graphic in Grey Hat, so I would post a link at the end of the chapter redirecting readers to the adult version of my Journal. The Journal, both the adult and the original, were meant for deleted scenes, alternate takes, half-complete story ideas, and the like. That’s where I was going to put it up. It ended up becoming so elaborately detailed that I decided it was better off becoming its own standalone story.

When I was scripting chapter 3 of Grey Hat, I encountered a unique situation where I could bump the sex scene up a chapter. Fluttershy goes to sleep, and AJ is going to wander the halls of the Ring, as i already made it clear she wasn’t ready for sleep. I couldn’t have her wander alone now, so i added Henry and Sophia to keep her company. But how to get her to sleep and give Flutters a little bit of privacy? Why, alcohol of course.

I wanted AJ and Sophia to get so fucking hammered they start getting some interspecies drunk sex on, only to not really remember anything the following morning. While just leaving it ambiguous was amazing to me, i wanted to write it out in full. A scene to shove in the journal was born.

So yeah, in short, I had a serious hardon to write some kind of sex scene for Grey Hat. Originally I wanted to write it at the end of the following chapter, but the chance to do so was too strong. The power of boobs and boners is mighty indeed, but I had a reason to do so regardless. I needed to leave Fluttershy alone after the two ponies found their rooms in the Ring, so where was I to put Applejack considering I already enforced her farm-induced labor hours prevented her from falling asleep at the time? I had wanted her to just walk around to exhaust herself, but that left her alone and open-ended. That's why I added Henry and Sophia to the mix, but that would invariably produce a talking scene that I didn't want to discuss later. What would be my way around that, be a way for AJ to get to sleep, and have a little fun?

Alcohol, of course. America's favorite anesthetic. Well, mine's morphine, but whatever. What followed was what happens when two individuals get abso-fucking-lutely trashed and proceed to fuck when someone else is passed out drunk right next to them. I originally wanted AJ to just wake up in Sophia's cleavage after a night of drinking and be just for a laugh, but the temptation to write a "What If?" scenario was far too strong. Call it the machinations of a perverted mind, or enhancing cross-species relations.

It's still horsefuckery.

However it didn’t occur quite the way I wanted. I started it as Sophia and AJ getting shitfaced and then sex. That’s it. I didn’t want it any more complicated than that. I am under the curse of some bastardized hybrid of gardener and architect. I didn’t know anything about what I was going to do going in, but once I knew how a scene was going to play out, I could not force myself to remove any detail whatsoever. Here’s a bit of the general madness.

The only one to be able to procure alcohol was Henry, so I scripted a full history why he could. More was needed to bridge the sex and then popping open the booze, so then came Sophia’s story about her beer crawl. Sexual foreplay to titillate readers? Sophia’s tattoos, which led to the kiss. Shit, what about Henry? Well, he’s passed out drunk right now. That would mean I would have to worry about waking him up then. They could go somewhere else, and I did specify they woke up in a supply closet in Grey Hat. But Sophia’s far too horny and drunk to be thinking about things like that, plus stealth sex is sexy. Why would AJ accept Sophia’s advances? Add the paragraph about the past. Who would start then? Sophia’s being the aggressor up to this point, so why not her. Shouldn’t AJ stop being the bottom bitch at some point? How about Sophia takes her teasing a little too far and AJ takes the initiative? Also, since I’m going to hell already because I did enough human/pony reproductive “research” to be put on the FBI’s most wanted, shouldn’t AJ be excited over alien anatomy in any regard?

How about Sophia’s HUGE FUCKING TITS.

.                                                        ~WB
I know you want to touch them.

Not to sound like a huge perv... because I am... but there’s something inherently satisfying about seeing a pair of breasts. I don’t mean in any sexual sense, I mean just seeing them. What was that like as a hormonal teenager? in particular, what thoughts were going through teen me’s head? As AJ said, pony breasts aren’t really visible until pregnancy. Since Sophia already had a rather impressive rack to begin with, what would AJ think of that particular set of assets? I kinda had to meta that out. She’s a farmer, so it’s like like she wouldn’t be around nursing mothers at some point (I am not going into the can of worms that is sentient livestock. Even I have standards.). The pony heat? Bigger breasts during child-rearing? the sexual implications of reproduction were there when AJ saw Sophia for the first time. A species that has their breasts on place 24/7? Nice. AJ has a new kink.

Things didn’t go as planned, at least at first. I couldn’t for the life of me tell you why, but by god I wanted Sophia to bite Applejack’s ass. Despite the story no longer existing in the Journal, I scrapped together something of an alternate ending where the bite didn’t occur. I desperately wanted that to happen so I scrapped the original scene and rewrote it to where Sophia made Applejack lie down, thus putting her in a better position to where the bite could occur.

I have written three clop-related works so far: Liquid Courage, SINless Desire, and my very first that popped my clop cherry (and also my personal favorite when talking just about clop), Apprivoiser. Despite three under my belt, not a single one actually deals with genuine romance. In Apprivoiser, Rarity is feeling lonely and seeks a courtesan. In SINless, the main character is just showing thankful appreciation to the pony who gave her kindness. In here, AJ unconsciously falls prey to the same distractions of many Magnasanti residents. As stated above, sex and entertainment among many other things are produced to keep a populace placated without actually addressing the real problem. Although Applejack doesn’t actually know it, she’s fallen prey to the same trap; in an effort to forget her past miseries, however brief, she’s taken the route of a warm bed with Sophia. Now that’s by no means a bad thing (I wrote it with the full intent of it being a good thing for Applejack), but it does give the implication that she may walk a perilously close line in the future. At what price is forgetting the past too high?

This one-off was also a means to test my might with Applejack. I’ve always thought of her as a supplementary character, one whose strengths come out only when she has someone to bounce off of. I needed practice writing her because i had the mentality that her actions and reactions were painfully limited. I needed to explore her character. I must say I rather liked what i found. i consider this experiment a rousing success.

jesus christ this keyboard hates capitalizing letters.