Second part of Chapter 8 Rewrite · 12:52am Aug 22nd, 2015
It's at 700 words, but I would like to have it more exciting.
Thoughts?
"Gunner, target the cannons directly in front of us," The tank commander ordered. “Use high explosive rounds.”
"Yes, sir," The gunner set the gun at the right angle as the loader placed the shell in the barrel.. "Shell away!" The tank's main gun opened fire, hitting the battery’s gunpowder, destroying the battery in the explosion. The Lennex troops woke up to the sound of the explosion, as the night sky light up with the fires of their ammo. Upon discovering that Imperial tanks were attacking, they sent out all two hundred of their tanks in that sector to meet the Imperials that began to drive back to their lines.
When the Lennex tanks left, The Imperial Commando Captain gave the signal for one of his squadmates to snipe the Lennex Captain trying to rally some of the men. The sniper took careful aim as he pulled the trigger. The bullet went straight through the captain’s head, causing blood to spill out as he fell backwards.
"Imperial Commando’s to the rear!" the next officer shouted Numerous squads of 4 or 5 Imperial commandos came out of hiding and began to cause havoc surprising the Lennex garrison. The Lennex troops tried to fight back, but were cut down by the commandos' superior firepower from their SMG's, bolt action, and semi automatic rifles.
"Keep moving!" The commandos ran behind cover to keep from getting shot. "Find cover!"
"Rally around me!" "Let's get out of here!" "Turn around and fight!" "Run for your lives!" The officers orders confused the Lennex soldiers to the point of confusion.
"Cover me, I'm reloading!" "Bazooka, over here!" "Grenade!" "Pour it into them!" "Get that MG set up!" The Imperials didn't show any mercy to their Lennex counterparts. What made the raid worse for the Lennex Empire was their fuel and ammo supply was specifically targeted and destroyed.
"Cpl. George, search that bunker. Take Pvt.'s Davis, John, Terry, and Meisha with you!" Ordered the commando officer. The five ran up to the door of the bunker. Pvt. Davis kicked the door open allowing Terry to toss a grenade into the opening.
"Fire in the hole!" He shouted. They held their ears as the grenade went off. Screams rang out after the explosion rocked the bunker. Meisha and John ran inside and opened fire with their SMG's, killing any survivors.
"Split up. Davis, John, and Terry, go right. Meisha, with me. We'll go left!" They broke off to search the rooms. Davis, John, and Terry entered the barracks and killed the Lennex soldiers that were sleeping. George and Meisha wiped out the radios before moving on. They regrouped outside the command room. Davis once again kicked down the door as all five ran into the room killing the last of the Lennex soldiers. After the room was secured, they began searching for any intel until John found something on the table.
"Sir, over here!" The others walked over to him.
"Let's get this back to HQ." They left the bunker and met up with their transports. Meanwhile, with the Imperial tanks, the Lennex armor was approaching slowly. The Imperial tank commander, Lt. David Soap, waited until they were in range before giving his order.
"Blow 'em up, boys!" He shouted. The Imperial forces opened fire to devastating effects as the Imperials' superior range and firepower carried the day, blowing all the Lennex tanks to pieces. The artillery opened up, blowing the rear armor into nothing.
"Return Fire!" The Lennex officer ordered.
"We can't," the gunner replied, "we're out of range!" Just as he turned back to the gun, their tank was rocked by an enemy shell, setting the engine on fire. Seconds later, the tank exploded, killing both crew members. During the raid, important maps were found in the Lennex Command Bunker and brought to the Imperial HQ.
"Looks like we will have to head right into the killing fields. But what they don't know is the size of the army approaching. Tomorrow, we attack the defenses and move towards Appleloosa. Braeburn, you and Pinkie will go the natives and see if they will join us." After the meeting, they went to bed. Tomorrow would be a busy day.
