Jul
7th
2012
Pre-readers please! · 6:56pm Jul 7th, 2012
Hello everypony, I am in need of pre-readers as it appears there are a few grammar problems with the stories that I have been putting up, currently I just need help with 'Equestria needs a doctor so if you could look over the first chapter which I will link and tell me the problems that you notice then that will be a great help. Thank you.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/36767/Equestria-needs-a-Doctor
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Emptiness, it was the only way the Doctor could really put it, emptiness. It had felt like this in the Tardis before, for brief periods however ever since losing Donna the place that he called home just didn’t seem alive enough for him anymore, he had a brief moment of happiness when he reunited a man with his son on Christmas day and stopped a cyberman invasion, but when he met a woman who he thought could refill the hole that Donna had left it turned out she was a thief and could not be trusted, that had stung him and he was back to mopping about the Tardis, just seeking a friend, a friend he knew he shouldn’t have, as he knew that any person he took with him would end up dead, hurt or changed forever.
moping
Donna had come back into his life when he needed her most, when he just needed a mate, no companion who developed feelings for him and he would eventually develop them back like Rose and even Martha to a degree, no, just a friend like Mickey or Sarah Jane, that was what Donna was to him, a friend he could see himself travelling with to the end of her days with.
