Taking a short break from writing. · 11:40am Mar 3rd, 2015
Don't worry, it's not going to be for months at a time!(At least it shouldn't be...
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Its just that I'm been writing EVERY SINGLE DAY FOR 8 HOURS STRAIGHT for the last week and a half and its starting to show as I found myself struggling with the latest chapter which is part two of the Earth Pony Master chapter.
Besides, its not like the story is on the featured listing or anything so there's no pressure to keep up a brisk update pace. I mean hell, Part of my daily update thing was because I was loving writing the story so much but the other part was hoping I could land a ton of readers due to showing them I was updating daily.
This bombshelled....HARD!
I suppose part of my struggle could be due to the lack of readers commenting on the chapters which curbed my creativity high.(In case you didn't know, your comments play a LARGE PART in how inclined and inspired I am to continue updating a fic.) But that's just speculation on my part, not sure if that has anything to do with it or not.
Regardless, I'm taking a short break and going to game veg out on fire emblem.
Till next time:
awwwwwwwwwww but I was just able to ketchup.... err catch up. but i can understand. but still i hope you don't lose motivation to update after some gaming this is a really great story and would hate to see it end up like nighmaremoons return
I don't mean to be rude or anything, so I'm going to keep this brief and short and to the point.
This is just from the description:
First problem. It seems to be centered around an !!ALICORN OC!! This turns people off to no end, for very obvious reasons.
Second problem. War. War being one of the central key factors. People generally read pony fanfics to avoid huge no-no things like this.
Third, Alicorns, which means four PLUS characters that we already know and love, have to disappear for the story to begin.
Now, I haven't read the story because these three big problems are a factor in whether or not I would read this, so I cannot judge the quality of the story. But I can tell you that these problems are a big factor in why people might not want to read it, and will probably mostly avoid it. The description also does not show much of what to expect other than a short, very brief explanation of what will transpire.
Perhaps a change is needed to the short description to hook someone into reading it, instead of simply telling people what transpired before the story happened?
Either way, I hope this is illuminating as a comment, and will possibly help in some way.
If not, More pornography please.
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DOH!
I should of remembered that everything went all raging hate once Twilight went Alicorn and the Alicorn drama that followed as the trolls prayed on the people who thought this was the WORST. POSSIBLE. THING!
Either way, this won't deter me in the slightest. People want to pass on a fic they could possibly fall in love with all because they wanna rage/hate on Alicorn OC's... LET THEM. I'd rather they ignore my fic than trash the comments section with their immature raging.
As for the "war theme", the war is over and I even said so in the description that this fic takes place in a post-war setting.
In regards to the other characters vanishing, well she wouldn't be the "Last Alicorn" if the others were still around, now would she?
I do agree though that I need to think of a better story description is needed. Most of my fics start with their descriptions being a little more or less than the plot synopsis I posted in a journal or elsewhere.
I certainly hope you do give it a chance though, I'd like to think I'm not like the others who make an Alicorn OC which is OP as fuck since the Alicorn in my fic becomes psychically weakened in how much Alicorn magic she uses. I mean heck(SPOILER ALERT!)In of the later chapters, she KILLS HERSELF in the process of saving the city and BARELY survives only due to a stubborn donkey doctor who doesn't want to give up on her but this results in her being in a coma for a year nearly with the doctors all thinking she would never wake up.(As in: she was dead for over 15mins and should not have survived)
So anyways, thanks for the advice and I'll see what I can do to spice up the story description
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It has nothing to do with how people didn't like Twilight becoming an alicorn at all, and more along the lines of just... red and black alicorn OCs that are brothers of celestia and luna and blah blah.
I suppose That was a mistake in me seeing the post war part. I still don't feel it's necessary. The world has not turned into a barren wasteland because a government shut down for a bit, and society will not fall into chaos because one or two leaders are gone.
The whole snarky little "Well she can't be the last alicorn if the other characters were there" doesn't excuse the fact that you're dismissing good characters for a simple OC.
From what I've heard from your spoiler, It just sounds like more and more of a... very bad story.
I tried to give you an explanation as to why people aren't reading a story like that, and gave my personal opinion on the matter. It's just not the sort of story that is widely read and enjoyed without a lot of polish and without there being an incredible story behind the equivalent of freaking immortal gods just... up and vanishing.
Your stories ARE good. It's just, This one I don't like and want to skip for something with more substance to it. I'm glad you've read my comment though, and you will take some help from it that you can
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SIMPLE?!
Well, excuuuuse me! I didn't know that I was a writer of so little talent that I couldn't create the same detailed characterization in an original character based story that the WRITERS of MLP:FIM did for their characters,
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.... -sigh- Here we go.
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You put your own foot in your mouth with that remark. Don't look at me and act like i'm being a drama-queen when you more or less insulted my writing skill by calling a character I wrote "Simple". If you read the story and gave more detail on what made Sapphire "simple" to you, then I wouldn't have responded like that but you said it yourself that you never read it. So how do you expect me or any other writer to react to a statement like that?
Granted I may have snapped at you but I'm sure a fair few other writers would have banned you from commenting on their profile/stories for a remark like that with nothing to follow up with or even bothering to read said fic.
Fortunately for me, I'm not that rude/over-reactive to such comments. I did take offense to it though.
I've put my heart into writing this fic and I have been doing my very best to flesh out enjoyable/interesting characters for my readers to enjoy.
That said, please be mindful of how you comment on something. You're more than welcome to keep your own opinions on Alicorn OCs being whatever you think they are but don't think everyone else is going to instantly agree with you or brush it off, especially the writer themselves.
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This is absolutely childish and pointless.
I'm not reading your story. I really don't care what you think of your own character and how high of a damn pedestal you think it should be on.
All I did was offer a simple idea of why people in general wouldn't flock to your goddamned story, and you snap at me and get so overly defensive like you were a furry with mental health issues.
Block me, By all means. block everyone who offers even the slightest indication of any negativity or critique like all other oversensitive people like you do. I still like your other stories, and I will continue to read them with a smile on my face.
You are.
No.
If you can't handle a simple critique on not even the full story, but just the description of the story itself, then you need all of the help you can get.
I'm actually half tempted to read it. Read it, write down every little thing that is just wrong with it, just so I can violently and hatefully rip it apart in front of you out of spite, show you EVERYTHING wrong with it, explain to you why it's wrong, for days at a time until you understand, but I highly doubt that you'll learn from the experience, and it would further waste everyone's time.
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Wow... I mean seriously, just fucking wow...
I was nice,polite, and even admitted to snapping at you... and this is how you respond?
By insulting me even more?
Any normal person would have flung their hands in the air and been done with it by this point.
God, I hate having the patience of a saint with people.
So here's what I'm going to do, I'm going just pretend it never happened.
You keep pressing it and I'll report you to an admin for harassment.
You can unfollow me, do what you like but I'm not about to snap off at you again, already made that mistake once.
Also: This was never about me wanting you to read my story, but I won't tolerate something short of a flame on a character/fic without even reading it just because someone dislikes/hates an Alicorn OC.
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The point went just right over your head.
Fine. I give up.
Well, I hope you take care. I only just started reading your stories about a half month ago, and I must say I love your stories regardless of certain themes and such. Really hope you enjoy your break! I'm sorry your story didn't get as far as you wanted it to..
Anyways, take care Deathsia!