YAYZ! · 3:26am Jul 6th, 2012
I recieved my first fully thought out review! I obtained it through Fanfiction.net, and I couldn't be happier with the result!
Oh my f***ing son of a-
Aw...what a shame, what a shame indeed. *sigh*
So it turns out Zecora wasn't evil. THEN WTF? Why would she leave that kind of note? Wouldn't it be easier to just say, "Oh, LoL. I need to go for some strange reason" instead of, "MUAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAH DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE!"
And we find out what happens to everyone else, in the end. Looks like everybody's dead. No one else to come save them. This is the end.
The end...
Well, now it's time for my comprehensive review! This is just a summerization that I give to all completed stories, including one-shots. I don't give them out because most stories I follow don't really have an ending, but for the ones that do, well, here you go...
CHARACTER: 8.75/10
Nice work portraying the mane six along with others! It was almost perfect, almost, but...
...not quite. I understand that it's a zombie apocolypse, and some parts of a character just can't concide with the show, you know, since everypony's dying everywhere. But some parts of the fic were kinda wierd. Take for instance, Rarity. Right from the start she's all, "Ima go around and save everypony's lives!" I don't know how much time has passed from the day zero to that point, but wouldn't she be all, "Ew. Dirt. Blood. Zombies. Ew." However, the part where she sacrifices herself to save Twilight makes up for it.
I'd say Fluttershy would be dead from the start. Don't know where she got her courage from, lulz. Applejack wasn't mad at all. She was just like, "Eeyup. Since ah just drank some wierd potion thing that mah friend Twi just made, ah'll just lay down here and die." Correct me if I'm wrong, but did Twilight even try to kill her?
Despite these slight errors, I still think that the majority is great! Minor things, really...
PLOT: 9.75/10
While I've seen some plots that include zombies and ponies, this story by far has the most extensive effort put into it. The creativity...originality...everything pointed in the direction of a great fic with an interesting plot. We follow Twilight's struggles all over the place, but in the end, she breaths her last. Amazing! Nice job on the plot!
DEVELOPMENT: 9.25/10
Minor grammatical errors in some places, with some plot holes mixed in, but you answered most of them in the end. That was the major thing wrong in this part. The plot holes. So many everywhere... The ten question list I sent you was only a small portion of the number I thought up. Oh well, you managed to patch up most of them in the last chapter! Nice job on your part! :D
OVERALL SCORE: 9.25/10
I really enjoyed reading a story with so much pizzaz in it. Really. This was what motivated me to go on with your until the end. Good luck on your future fanfics and endeavors, and I'll (hopefully) hear you soon!
WELL DONE! :D
Over and out!
BlasianAsian
YAY!
*happy for you noise*
215308
Sorry, but I just had to tell somepony, even though you might be the only one to see it.
Also, starting back on that dark story I sent ya. Are ya thinking about doing the comedy one?
215324 Oh I already started the comedy one. I just need to reformat it and...work on it some more.
215336 I see.
Looking forward to reading it!