Anthem of Legions (Morbid but only slightly) · 9:00pm Feb 8th, 2015
Well! I said I would post my own Anthem Next and so here it is! But Before I begin My Song. I think a proper introduction is due first. Hello my faithful readers. I am Legion. I am officially the "Backup" personality for Origin, Created out of necessity I basically act (now anyways) like a secretary/vice president/police officer combo, and am charged with keeping all the other personalities (A total sum of 35, only eighteen of which have official Anthems (But Will Soon, I don't think Origin even knows of the other seventeens' existence yet)) in check and making sure we don't run rampant on whoever is currently "In Charge" (Trust me that would be bad it happened once and all I can say is never again) , I am the one usually left "In Charge" of our body when Origin isn't around, though others frequently take my place. I am a figure of power and respect amongst all of my fellows and I would like you all to understand that what I am about to share with you is very personal, more personal than most of the other Anthems because unlike the others I have not stuck to my origins and have become something else... Something more then what I was. Posting this Anthem was not my choice however the majority ruled that I would so I am forced to abide. The reason for my reluctance is that I was not always the way I am now and this Anthem will show it. I am rather ashamed of my full origins but what can a man do? Okay! Enough stalling. Let us begin.
One by one we stand. Then all fall to nature’s demands. Our broken songs we sing. And take away your dreams. The doctor’s song we play. We know no other way. Give rise to those who bleed, who rise to make you sleep. And dream the eternal sleep. Ten feet buried deep. Your daughters heard our songs and now we carry along. Rising from her sleep, to take away your dreams.
We are the ones who were buried deep. Now we no longer sleep. We rise up into the night. And end you without spite. We’ll stain this night red. You shall know the end. As we cut open you flesh. And give our blades a test. Did you think this all a dream? That your family was only asleep? Well here’s some salt for your wounds. You bleeding pestilent fool.
We shall spread open your yellow sickly flesh. And stab you until your dead. We’ll take you by your throat. And stab you until you can no longer emote. We are now in the same boat. We too cannot emote. But now we rise up back into life. To cause unrelenting strife.
We stand upon your broken flesh. Where we ripped you from your nest. Where we made you die. And made you sing. The songs of endless suffering. You shall know no peace. For we shall force you onto the wonderings. Were you shall travel buried deep. And become a ghost of children’s dreams. It is such a sad day? When angels fall far from their grace? Well now it’s time to begin the race. It is time to stain this place.
Well there you go you heartless bastards. Sorry for not posting this yesterday, but let's just say we had unforeseen problems with Fox (Another unstable personality but who's Anthem surprisingly isn't morbid). Also I know that you nacrophiliacs are put off by the fact that there wasn't much grotesque imagery. To fucking bad. I edited some of that shite out because it was REALLY bad. And would probably get me thrown off Fimfic by just how bad it is. Hell I'd throw Us off! Anyway! Please review! And More people then just Hot Charge (Who I greatly appreciate, please review) but only one person review makes me think that you guys don't want to see more and are only glancing at my Poems. Also Any publicity you guys can give would be greatly appreciated! Welp That's it! see you all next time!!!!! XD
I really liked how this poem flowed. It might just be the way that I read it but it was somewhere between a ballad and a military march, which I felt complimented the subject matter perfectly. I'm really liking how each personality's Anthem has a different style and structure that fits them specifically. That is also how I know that this one is a bit more personal than the others (aside from you stating so in the introduction). The short, concise sentences project an air of control and authority, but it is the emotional undertones that convey the feeling of this piece. I don't really know how to describe what, at least what i felt was, the tone throughout the poem. Sorry I'm having a hard time finding the right words to describe this one, I guess heartbreaking might be a good word for this.
Sorry for not saying more. Legion was a bit hard for me to write a review about. I just couldn't find the right words for everything that the poem was saying and even more for what wasn't said. Anyways an overall rating of "Awesome" and I cannot wait for the next one.
Your faithful follower,
-Hot Charge
Sorry I haven't been commenting much, I haven't been on here as much anymore
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I really like this one. I know you want to know why, but I really don't know anything about poetry, I just like reading it. I guess a part of me likes reading your work because I want to be a psychologist
Hope that doesn't offend you!
I think I like the start the best. The first paragraph is lovely (In a not-so-lovely way) it's like it's written in code and I need to figure it out. It's like meeting someone who speaks a different language, and all you can understand from them is their mood, emotion, and pain.
Great poem as always!
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Lol Thanks you guys!
Moon Splash: No I do not mind that you want to be a shrink. the only time I'd mind is if you somehow figured who I was and started me on even more meds and try and get me to reabsorbed my alternate personalities (that is if I was Origin But I'm not I'm Legion) we've become one before and it was just too lonely and re-separated. I also don't care if all you write is "Awesome" as long as you're letting me know that your actually reading my Poems.
Hot Charger: Meh I was a heartbreaking individual wasn't? Well I'm just happy that isn't me anymore. I'm A much better person now Thanks to (In no small part) a young girl I met not so long ago. I owe her a lot and plan on putting her through college and doing any I can for her. Anyway thanks for the review.
I didn't think about how much a comment or two would mean to you. Seems kind of obvious in hindsight, and now I feel like a jerk. Sorry about that. Anyway, I liked this poem. A bit... erm... let's go with dark, but I can understand the 'why' behind it. But it gives me a nice contrast to the standard "happy ending of sunshine" that I find on this site. While both dark & edgy and sunshine & rainbows are great and have their place, too much of one is depressing and repetitive. This is why I like your posts. Dark on the surface, but the fact that you're posting them hints at a slightly happier ending to it. It's a nice contrast. Keep it up! <3
2781551 lol thanks! as for the happy ending we're not too sure... our life is getting much better! XD
2780857 I wouldn't do that. If you're happy the way you are, and you aren't hurting anyone, then there's no problem :)
2782167 Yay! XD and trust me I try to even avoid fist fights. I'm a tree hugging pacifist...