Rainbow Factory · 12:53pm Dec 8th, 2014
I don't like it (I know, I'm the spawn of Satan). For the actual reason, go look at my post on the story. In short; too many local problems and plot holes pile up over the course of the story. Also, the twist you can see coming from a mile away, though there's no foreshadowing to it, which is essential for a twist to be a good one.