Nov
12th
2014
Revised! · 11:27pm Nov 12th, 2014
Thanks to EQD I was able to fix the lousy mechanics of my writing, remove some of the telling and rework the bad paragraphs. (Or so I believe.) I'm still not sure if I want to resubmit this thing or not. Anyway, I added some paragraphs, removed others, changed the dialog a little, but the over all story hasn't changed. But have a look, if you're interested in seeing the changes.
Thanks to everyone who has favorited this story so far. I feel like I improve with each story I write, and one of these days I'll get it right. 
Oh man now I want to be cool like Rarity and hug Sweetie Belle... okay hugging complete... wait, one more thing...By the powers of Fluttershy the hugs have been doubled!
Okay on to my Comment... Okay I will reread the story... later... I have actually come to be inspired to write a sequel. I know, I really should be working on the stuff I said I would work on, but this one has beat me to death with inspiration and then it reanimated my dead tissue with the lightning of friendship... also head canon and Luna.
Also Twixie will help me double the hugs again.
2590861 So let see, lots of hugs and more hugs. Wait, what are you writing a sequel to?
2590884 I will hug everypony! Also I am writing a sequel to Nightmare's Moon. I'm about halfway finished so far and mostly I have been inspired by the Lunar Pegasi and THIS song. Which is about the Lunar Pegasi... so yeah!