Short Snippet Of The Next Chappy! · 1:47pm Oct 21st, 2014
I only hoped that somehow…Chrysalis and Luna would find some way to understand why I left. I could try to explain what Celestia did to me but…but I knew deep down that the chance of my being believed was all but non-existent.
Still…I would try.
I have no training in resisting pain, but I am human! My kind fought its way to the top and I’ll be damned if a little pain caused by a crazy equine manages to break me down!
That thought filled me up, repeated over and over until I couldn’t stop grinning. The first natural grin I’d worn for a while.
But you love her, a small voice whispered, barely noticeable within my mind.
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What…no, no I don’t! Not after all she’s done to me, I refuted angrily. Why on Earth would I love a mare who could and would easily wreck my life just to keep me with her?
So angry was I at the treacherous thought that I barely just noticed its reply.
Because you like what she’s doing to you, don’t you? it asked rhetorically. The way she mothers you and cares for your every need. The warmth of her coat against your terribly cold skin...ohh, can you feel it now? Feels good doesn’t it?
I couldn’t stop the flush that adorned my cheeks as I realized the cruel truth in its words, though whether embarrassed or angry I couldn’t quite tell the two apart.
Shut up, I don’t love her!
It’s easy to think it to yourself, isn’t it, the voice whispered once again. But could you think it directly? Could you look her in the eye and tell her that you love her no longer?
I’ve already done that! I replied stiffly, my previous happiness now long banished by the whisper.
You denied your relationship, not your love for her, it countered effortlessly. But by all means go on, tell her now. Wake her up and explain away your complete and total lack of love for her. Tell her that your heart is hers no longer and prove me wrong, go on, do it.
Fine! I all but snarled, my terribly shaky, terribly cold left hand weakly touching her face so as to wake her.
The swiftness in her awakening was rather sluggish for a bringer of the dawn. But…as she blearily blinked and looked at me, an open smile slowly forming upon her muzzle as she seemed to realize where my hand was, I felt my angry oncoming rant…waver slightly.
“Mhmm, what’s the matter honey?” she asked, yawning softly, her left hoof gently stroking my cheek. “Do you need to go to the bathroom?”
Say it, the voice whispered. Go on, cause her pain, break her heart. Let her know that you love her no more. Let her know that you HATE her, that you DON’T need her anymore!
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I thought so...
Oh goddess I am so ready for this chapter now.
The drama, the suspense ...it's torture.
Did Toby already drank from Celestia's magical voluptuous tits?
That's either Schizophrenia or celestia's magic (or both)
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Still, good to see you back in action.
i bet this chapter will be wonderful
Because of this, I will read these today...
Just reading it brings to mind almost every story you have ever written.
The generic part of the body saying no.. or its another being, maybe apart of celestia?
Releasing this chapter ruins the story as a whole. This hasn't been worth of the dark tag, this story is good. Dont ruin it here! Making the guy fall in love, at LEAST this soon is too soon. I have waited weeks to see the true dark side you have let us taste of celestia. Making him fall back in love after all he's been through now from some unknown source is to generic, and really shows us your either running out of ideas, or this is going to be another "Zamariac Incompleted story" or Hiatus..... Make her dark, make him get away to chrysalis, or luna.. don't let him so easily succumb to her "love" jut make luna or someone "walk in" on a wrong time. By this time chrysalis or luna must be wondering why he hasn't talk to them in DAYS.
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He hasn't 'fallen in love with her', he never really stopped.
Imagine you found someone who you loved so utterly, someone who you would give your life for knowing that she'd do the same. Imagine exploring your life with that person by your side, thinking and hoping that you'd continue to do so for the rest of your life.
Now imagine feeling all of that, only for that very person to show a side of themselves you didn't know was there, a side that you were afraid of and thus put distance between you and her.
Imagine that person did something truly horrible to get you back, to convince you that she is where you belong.
You don't stop instantly loving a person, it just doesn't work like that. That said, I can assure you that he is NOT going to roll over and accept her again. He still wants to escape, no matter his feelings on the matter. The 'voice' in his head is...well, for now I suppose I can settle with calling it doubt. Though how it's there and why I will not reveal until it's time.
You can guess away mind you.
In any case, don't judge before the chapter is out. It just makes you look kinda silly.
Oh and as for Chrysalis and Luna, go and read Celestia's interlude for answers. Obviously you haven't if you're wondering about them.
2547756 Thanks for answering though it doesn't make me look silly to put out what i said, i was merely stating my opinion and what i thought would happen. hopefully it deterred you too not do what i said it MIGHT do.
Do what you will, your explanation on the whole loving part was completely unnecessary.
I get the story i never thought he stopped loving, but throughout the story he acts as though he can't hold himself from saying he doesn't love her... He should.. he should, he will break her heart (even though he does and apart of celestia still knows he does) Her inner darkness comes out and we see the part of celestia you have been showing us bit by bit.
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Her inner darkness comes...after the seventh day.
What, did you think it would end there?
From the looks of it I thought it would end shortly. But it looks like you made a hopefully better plan than I thought you would.