A purveyor of intelligent literary commentary some of the time, and whatever I feel like the rest of the time.
There! I've only completed the first chapter, but so far "Solutions", henceforth titled "Freedom", is at least 320% better.
I've made this Lyra a much darker and more interesting character, and it really complements the story nicely. Though it's slower writing for her now, it's far and away worth it.
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3 and 1/5 times better? That's quite impressive.
Darker Lyra? Well I suppose she just found out that the heroes of her mind were actually senseless murderers but hmmm. I'm curious as to where you go with this.
159675
Well it's awaiting approval, so hopefully you'll get to see soon! 100 bits says you don't see it coming.
And to be fair, the first version stank XD
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Thanks for the final decisive argument to prove that you are an amazing author.
If you had said, 'the first version was okay I just feel that this one is better' I would kick you in the face. With a boot.
A true author, in my opinion, will always think that their work is horrid. Or, at least, that it could always be improved.
Can't wait for the story, see ya on the flip side.
-N64Fan