Should I publish

Okay the edit first chapter of Sombra's heir is half done but my proofreader isn't in the mood for editing over two weeks and it is half done but a half ass product is still bad what do you think?

Comments

[DevourMistress]

use microsoft Word for writing and take examples of how other people write long stories. Also read your story over a few times, so that you know what it will look like. Then take few days break from it once it's done and then read it again, just to see it in other respective than when you were writing it.

There's also the style of how you write the story. For example :

"Sombra walked into the alley and saw a dead woman holding a crying baby"

Or

"Sombra slowly entered the dark alley, listening for the source of crying as he walked deeper. Soon, he noticed a pale, lifeless looking woman sitting against the wall, holding a blanket where the source of crying was a young baby. Kneeling down, he took the baby into his arms as he quickly inspected the woman, who has been apparently dead for some time now."

There are of course different styles in the writing, but i did the quick example so that you understand what i mean. And seriously, you don't need a proofreader who doesn't even bother doing his job correctly, just let the more professional readers and writers guide your actions once you release the first chapter. It's fully up to you when you want to release it, and don't let anyone pressure you to release it when your not ready or it's still incomplete

[DemonOJM]

2257921 Well good ma'am? There are many problems I got first english isn't my first language not so much a problem except you're looking for a word and you pick the wrong translation. Oh and Word I used it and changed it to american english and it didn't find mistakes except names but there were so many comments about grammar mistakes. And the last problem is I'm not so good at paceing because I#m a direct type of guy like Big Mac yes, no done. It would help when in the comment section came some question so I get what I can expand and wouldn't need a proofreader/editor . I even would be happy with just a prereader but every story I write it is the same game search for someone for 2 month whiout succes publish it unedit get into popular box search again so many respond with who would do only one who worked with me and now he is gone? The same old feces.

[DevourMistress]

2258069 Hey, the English isn't my first/main language either and i'm still keeping the readers interested. And besides, most what i write is done within 20 min. I literally only spend 2 min in that comment that i wrote.

so anyway if your proofreader isn't answering, find someone else. i can give you link where to find some. And as for the pacing, i know you wish to be straight forward, but you need to write more detail into the text, otherwise it's almost like your just writing the dialogue and leaving a lot out of the story, which makes most readers annoyed. (no offence intended, just speaking from experience. That's why i write small chapters with long space of time between, just to give readers a middle finger for commenting my grammar)

And to speak about writing a story, you really need to understand the English language when your writing it. The translators will make it worse or sometimes make it say entirely different than intended. And while your reading this, you might notice that i'm using very simple English, only in complicated way so that people don't realize i'm not originally from English speaking country.

So, all you need is writer help and proofreader. If you want, i can give you links to places here in Fimfiction where to look for them

[Iroh Legoman]

Hire me as proof reader

And yes

[Trimontar]

so is this fic even going to start?

[DemonOJM]

2579065 You know what you're right I work on that.

[DemonOJM]

2579065 Back again