Not Well · 1:14am May 25th, 2014
"Not well" is an understatement of how Terror In the Skies is going. It's prologue is flatout shitty (my editor and I agree) and chapter 1 is follow the same path. The problem is that I'm trying to describe things in ways that the main 6 (+Spike) would understand. Like they wouldn't know what an ATV is but I have to try describing it anyway, making this a huge pain in the ass. I'm either going to throw the story into storage or hand it off to someone who wants to take the concept.
If anyone wants Terror In the Skies or knows someone who's looking for a story, talk to me. For now I'll be getting to work on chapters 31, 32 and 33 of The Adventures of Fragment, even though I'd like to get another story here published.
Oh, and I've thought of a non-MLP story I want to write on dA, so there's that too.
~A Dark Reminder
Why don't you send the link and I'll look over it and see what I can do. Least I can do for all touché done for me.
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You want the prologue the first chapter or both?
2142741 both I guess. Just PM me what you got, and I'll get it back to you in the morning.
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That has yet to be seen.
2142798 okay... Well, whenever your ready then
Man. Don't give up on shit. Just try to compare the things you can to Equestrian technology, if it can be called that, and tell what you know how to describe yourself. Like the greater distance to the ground to maneuver in rocky terrain.
And for the things you can't describe with comparisons or via explaining just say that this is all you know and you can't describe it any better yourself.
That usually works.
I mean, nobody is expected to know everything about every matter they are facing.
Most writers are explaining what they can and take guesses where they don't know shit. So you're not off in the far end if you do so too.
Dragon
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That's what I've been doing, and it's REALLY difficult.
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Well. We don't know much about Equestrian technology other than some spouts here and there. At least not canon wise. Other than that it seems to be like the mid ages around the Arthur time in the rural parts and big city life like NY in the 80's or 90's. No high advanced technology and mostly horse drawn carriges, trains and things like plows.
Just go with something like "I don't know the details, but it's something like a carrige with more space between the ground and the bottom of it. It has strong rubber tires and an high efficient engine to pull you though nearly every terrain, like the engine in your train to Appleloosa, but a bit different function wise. It has a big cabin with seats in it and a stirring wheel to change directions. Its six wheels are running in pairs and can move independently. Each wheel gets the power of the engine to be moved forwards, so when one or more are stuck in the air it's still able to move. Other than that I don't know much about the mechanics of it. You'd have to scan it yourself to get all the parts completely. But I won't let you. I still need it."
Something like that.
Dragon
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The way you set up your example sounds more like you're saying it directly to the main 6.
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Well. I was adapting a direct speech for anypony to understand and doing it like this was also the easiest way for me.
Like saying it directly to a pony.
Was just my mind thinking in ways. Don't mind my mind too much for that. It likes to wander.
Dragon
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Don't let it wander too far without protection.
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pro-what now?
My mind goes where it wants. Not even I can stop it, let alone others.
But that' good. If I were normal it would be pretty boring and I wouldn't be as creative.
Dragon
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True dat.