More edits · 7:09pm May 15th, 2014
Cleaned up some of the language in Dedication. Fixed a thing where I called Phil a pegasus after saying he lifted the photo with unicorn magic. Did a bit more work with Braeburn's language. He's now a might more farmpony like Ah reckun. I've just offended so many people. Like the 3 people that read these.
Fixed up the language in Understanding. Expanded the Rainbow/Thunder scene. I feel Dash being the one to ask someone else out kind of fits her brash character. And Thunderlane is just plain confused.
Oh and if you're wondering why I keep republishing chapters, it's not to get views. It's because most of this work is done in school and if I save when I'm switching classes or doing other work, the chapter I was working on will look even worse with half-formed thought everywhere. So, only if I need to, I un-publish the chapter until I'm done so that I can save without the story being updated, then I republish when I'm done.
Just thought I'd explain that in case a friendly but suspicious mod comes to visit my page. Which of course will never happen.
Good luck with the rest of the editing :)
Thank you. I keep looking back and thinking, "Ew, who wrote that. Oh wait. That was me." Lol