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Alaborn


Somewhere in the USA. Probably older than you. And something about MLP:FIM makes me want to write stories. Unfortunately, being gainfully employed cuts into my writing time.

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  • 146 weeks
    Retrospective Review: Strong Seconds

    Not an episode review this time.

    PresentPerfect writes about the "Applejack Problem", that a character with everything figured out becomes too boring. Her cutie mark is literally deciding she wants to stay home.

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  • 146 weeks
    Retrospective Review: Putting Your Hoof Down and It's About Time

    S2E19 Putting Your Hoof Down

    Watching this episode as part of the whole series is jarring. You have episode after episode of ponies being kind and friendly, then a whole bunch of rude ponies all at once.

    I hate Angel Bunny in this episode. I want to turn him into hasenpfeffer.

    I'd like to know why there just happens to be a hedge maze somewhere near Ponyville.

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    3 comments · 213 views
  • 150 weeks
    Retrospective Review: Hearts and Hooves Day and A Friend in Deed

    S2E17 Hearts and Hooves Day

    The writers have chosen, once again, to feature a holiday or celebration in this episode. Arguably, this is the seventh time (Summer Sun Celebration, Winter Wrap Up, Running of the Leaves, Grand Galloping Gala, Nightmare Night, Hearth's Warming, Hearts and Hooves Day), and the third time directly referencing a major American holiday.

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    3 comments · 204 views
  • 151 weeks
    Retrospective Review: The Super Speedy Cider Squeezy 6000 and Read It and Weep

    S2E15 The Super Speedy Cider Squeezy 6000

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  • 152 weeks
    Retrospective Review: Baby Cakes and The Last Roundup

    S2E13 Baby Cakes

    So this was an episode that came completely out of the blue. There was no indication of Cup Cake being pregnant, let alone with twins. I'm assuming there was a toy involved.

    "That makes sense, right?" Sure, but if you're a pegasus stallion with a beige coat or a unicorn stallion with a yellow coat, I wouldn't recommend dining at Sugarcube Corner.

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Apr
25th
2014

New story.... Ever wonder what the events of Ponyville look like to the ponies in the background? · 2:27am Apr 25th, 2014

A story idea I've had for a long time involved a police detective who just wants a quiet retirement. So he moves to Ponyville. Unfortunately for him, he moves there three days after Twilight Sparkle.

The story idea is old enough that a few details from it found their way into my other stories.

Here is Retirement Blues.

Sergeant Gold Watch is a tough-as-nails detective in the Canterlot Police Department. He has faced hardened criminals, vicious monsters, and cataclysmic threats to the kingdom. He now faces his greatest challenge yet: retirement. Heading to quiet Ponyville, many thoughts weigh on his mind. How can he build a better relationship with his daughter? Where can he find a decent cup of coffee and some fresh doughnuts? And how can he stop thinking about the one case he never solved?

And speaking of the prospect for a quiet retirement, what's this he hears about Princess Celestia's personal student moving here?

The story will involve Colgate, the Cakes, Golden Harvest, and some OCs, including the detective mentioned in the blurb. I've posted the first two chapters, though I'm holding off on submitting the story for now. I have some questions for my readers:

For one, what the heck do I use as a picture for this story?

More importantly, what episodes would you like to see referenced in the story? Do you want to see what the ordinary townsponies thought about a dragon covering their town in smoke? Witness their reaction to an Ursa Minor trampling through the town? Wonder what they thought of Discord's antics?

Regardless of how many chapters I end up writing, it will come to a conclusion prior to the changeling attack. So think about episodes during the first two seasons.

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Comments ( 2 )

I for one would like to see background reactions (besides the general panic) during and after the fact to the parasprite invasion.

The Trixie/Ursa Minor incident (and return of Trixie) would be interesting as well, though Trixie's return is probably too late.

Well, searching "A pony in handcuffs" only gives -- YIKES! Off! Off! Where's the button!!!

*whew*

Ahem. As I was saying, perhaps you could make your own Police Badge from an existing design, such as encrypted-tbn1.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcSOh8hQ7gcPfNfrr1V3P23nfocbjA5LKdFzGPJ_GH2lO7u3ANmWWA (if that comes through)
or a screen shot of this animated GIF
https://derpiboo.ru/images/324760

I'm actually old enough to remember Dragnet, and the police badge that it used for an intro.
Dragnet B/W intro
Did that help?

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