My first fan-fiction on FIMfiction

Yesterday, i've published my first episode of "The Jade Series" in english, was a tiring traduction work and even if it could has a bunch of grammar/translation errors, i'm proud of it, because is my first long publication fully translated to English.

I'm hoping someone tell me all my errors to improve my english redaction, so if you like the history's plot (not the Eequor's plot, she is happily married with Arioch) and are good in grammar, you can let me a comment or a private message with my errors.

What is exactly "The Jade Series"?

- The Jade Series is a fan-fic that occurs arround my OC, Elrik Jade, at first, Elrik besides than my nickname and (with a little change in how it is spelled) a Moorcock's Multiverse Series character, was a roleplay OC. As experienced roleplayer and game director, i doesn't like to have a character without backdrop, thats the reason i've started to write, later, i was enjoying the writing and the ideas what were floating in my mind and decided to turn it all in a fan-fic.

i've created a little list of OC and possibles OCs names i just used it while i was writing, then i was improvising and the first episode, a introduction to the Elrik's life became an Arioch introduction too and most of my Spanish readers (the ones what revises most the history and coherence than grammar and spelling errors) told me they liked the characters so it opened my mind to new "time lines" where the main character is not Elrik (or even Arioch!!)

enjoy the reading.