Why "Sweetie's Mansion" by Moon Shooter SUCKS! · 11:32pm Apr 1st, 2014
This FanFic has been bugging me for the longest of times. And today, I've finally been able to voice my frustration to someone who hasn't read this abomination. Her is what I said to that person, who will remain Anonymous of course.
You don't say. . .well then, I need you to listen to me an no one else. I know that seems like an outrageous claim, but just trust me on this.
DO NOT read "Sweetie's Mansion." It's a Sweetie Belle Torture Porn.
I know what I'm talking about here, because I've played Luigi's Mansion for the Gamecube. Luigi had to go through a haunted mansion in fight ghosts, but the key is that I always felt in control, I felt that I was making progress, I enjoyed fighting all the ghosts, and the goal of saving Mario seemed obtainable. Luigi's Mansion was fun.
However, in "Sweetie's Mansion," the ghosts Sweetie Belle is fighting aren't random spirits who present a fun and clever battle, they're her own ghostified friends who insult her, spit on her, and tear her down during the battles, during which Sweetie Belle is mentally and physically tortured! And even when she wins and catches her ghostified friends, it doesn't seem like it's resolving anything. Also, the author adds in unnecessary plot points; like an aged up, old, decrepit, half dead Twilight; and Sweetie Belle getting possessed by an evil spirit and further tormented that way.
"Sweetie's Mansion" has got to be one of the most uncomfortable, mean spirited, miserable, depressing, soul crushing, hopeless fanfictions I have ever read. I thought it was gonna be a fun spooky adventure like the game it was based on, but after a bunch of chapters which could make a game two times as long as Luigi's Mansion; oh that's another thing, this story never ends. Just never. Sweetie's in limbo. She's never gonna get out of the mansion. There's no salvation for her I'm afraid. While Luigi's Mansion had plot twists and turns that made you more interested in the plot, you just want this painful experience to end already. You're begging for a cheat code that could make the author skip to the final boss chapter.
I couldn't take it anymore, I gave up on that story. Maybe if it ever ends I'll read the last chapter for the happy ending. But trust me, that story is just to mean spirited and depressing to be enjoyable. You'd be better off just playing "Luigi's Mansion." At least that's fun and spooky in a fun way that makes you feel you're going on an adventure, not living Hell.
Oh yeah, and I forgot, this story likes to have these stupidly retarded "Game Over" scenarios that show Sweetie Belle dying over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over!
This story is utter torment. If you're going to have an adventure where the protagonist is put through suffering, then at least have it go quickly. This story is longer than a college text book! Imagine Cupcakes going on for 30 chapters! That's what this horrible story is. Don't read this sadistic pile of cruel garbage. Please. Don't. Just don't. It sucks.
It sounds awesome! I love a grimdark fics. If the author is creative with their evil, awesome!
If you hate 'torture fics' why the heck do you like Hard Reset? Doesn't that have the same degrees of torture if not more, but just has less shown, hell you even liked PAGES OF HARMONY!?
... Must just be April fools day.
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Okay, I am going to stop you right there.
First of all, in "Hard Reset," the plot is an epic, time travel, testosterone, blood and guts war story with magic and fighting and all that good stuff. Also, Twilight isn't an innocent little child! Also, Twilight isn't being spit upon and verbally abused and betrayed by her friends in "Hard Reset". Also, "Sweetie's Mansion" is like 20 times longer than "Hard Reset." And the "Game Overs" in "Hard Reset" are actually part of the plot.
Second of all, "Pages of Harmony" was a psychological study into the mind of a character who feels that eugenics is a good thing, as well as a study of the natural progression of an insane person. Also, a fatal flaw this site has is in order to be notified when a story is updated, you're forced to favorite. I wish I could get Email alerts without having to favorite a story. Anyway, "Pages of Harmony" is very self aware of how "Cupcakes" it is, and uses that as a framing device for Twilight's insanity. I skip all the torture scenes in order to get to the evil Twilight Sparkle plot. That's the main point of the story, and I find the concept of Twilight going bad to be very interesting, and the author portrays an insane/evil Twilight very well.
There's no intrigue in seeing Sweetie Belle, a little kid, get physically and mentally tormented as the end of the story keeps getting further and further away. You can skip the torture in "Pages of Harmony." The plot of "Sweetie's Mansion" IS torture, so it can't be avoided.