Halfway there! Halfway there. Halfway there... · 8:03pm Feb 25th, 2014
It's taken me nearly three months, but I finally have a status update for Filly Fluttershy: Uprising. And thankfully it took me less time to get this out than the last update (depending on when you start counting). This blog post will cover the rewrite for Heads of the Hewdraw, as well as progress on The Lightning Chariot, so it's going to be a relatively short post.
-Almost every weapon featured in Filly Fluttershy has been tested and approved for its chapter at a minimum 7.0 Intensity. Yes, including the Paw Pads. Even though they suck.
Now first and foremost, the Heads of the Hewdraw chapter has finally been rewritten, and the rewrite is now up. In addition to the usual fare for these rewrites, I've also switched the places of two of the Hewdraw heads. Those of you who've played the game know what that means, and those who haven't should be able to figure it out easily.
Admittedly, I wouldn't say I've weeded out all the problems of this chapter. Off the top of my head, I don't think I'll ever be able to nail Celestia's dialogue, specifically her diction. But I will say that this chapter came out much better than the original version. Believe me, I've spent well over a month staring at the original version, even while I was proofreading the rewrite. It reads better, the dialogue is better (or at least more original), and there's even some new content in there that, while it doesn't change the storyline, really works well with the chapter. Go give it a read when you get the chance. This is the definitive version of this chapter, and I don't see myself rewriting it again.
... Unless I find someone who doesn't mind editing for a story that's already eighteen chapters and 120k words in and subject to revision. And even then, I'd want to keep him/her away from the first two or three chapters, if only because I really want to get a move on with new chapters.
-Oh, what the hell?
I've decided to backtrack on one of my earlier decisions and keep the links to the game's music in the chapters. Turns out this was one of those things I couldn't follow through on. The mock loading screens are still being phased out though, so I'm still figuring out the best place to put some of these.
-"Are we there yet?"
Now I've said in previous posts that I've wanted to rewrite the early chapters for quite some time now. But after spending some of the last three months working on The Lightning Chariot, I remember one of the major reasons why I'm doing this now of all possible times. It's because this chapter is every bit as dull, repetitive and tedious to write as it is to play in the actual game. It comes across as 'enter a room, clear it, go to the next room, rinse and repeat,' and that's something that I've really hoped to avoid with this story. Because of that, this is easily my least favorite chapter to play/write in the Chaos subarc.
But on the bright side, I have made a fair bit of progress with this chapter. At 7,413 words, I can say that I'm about halfway finished with it, maybe a little more, and I will try to get more done in the next few weeks. Without giving too much away, this chapter will introduce three new characters, and those who've played the game already know that someone dies at the end of it. Unfortunately, one of you following the story will not like who it is...
With that said, you can all expect the rewrite for The Reaper's Line of Sight to be out in another few months. Hopefully, The Lightning Chariot won't be too far behind.
